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Wack Jack RIP [Track 1]

Postby J.R. » Oct 11th, '11, 20:35

Link of feed in by tomorrow.

[Verse 1]
He's been jacked and ripped,
Called wack then bit,
Everyday he'd get racked and hit,
They attack from behind like they had a clit,
He's dope, which is a fact you'll miss,
If you lose control, and rap a diss,
Go ahead, go on and take a piss,
But thats your downfall, Like I'm on some rapist shit,
Dope like nas, Have you thinking who's tape is this?
Save the top for me, cause I don't play to miss,
Sorry guys, only dope rappers make my favorites list,
My poisonous flow will make you flip,
So think twice before you take a sip,
You wack faggots should jump in a lake and quit,
Cause to be real, You're more bait than fish!
Just continue to wish, while you shake you bitch!

[Chorus]
So if my raps are shit,
Why you track jack my hits?
If I am wack,
Why you try to bite my ass?

[Mini-verse 2]
Try to steal my lyrics again I dare you,
See how that fares you, I'll scare you,
And scar, You brain will need a trip to the ER,
Ship you to jupiter, did you wanna see mars?
I know im dope, your in love with these bars,
My rhymes are so fly, they touch the stars


[Chorus]
So if my raps are shit,
Why you track jack my hits?
If I am wack,
Why you try to bite my ass?
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Re: Wack Jack RIP [Track 1]

Postby Sam. » Oct 11th, '11, 21:04

B.Nutz is back in this Bitch. :worship:

The 1st thing that I'll say is the Multis that you maintained were really awesome.Some were forced and were clearly visible.Shorter bars with long Multis always end soon if ever Recorded,so if you plan on doing so make this large or add the second verse to it.

I really liked this lines.

Dope like nas, Have you thinking who's tape is this?
Save the top for me, cause I don't play to miss,
Sorry guys, only dope rappers make my favorites list,

You wack faggots should jump in a lake and quit,
Cause to be real, You're more bait than fish!
Just continue to wish, while you shake you bitch!
[Rollefsen] - SajN retired, bitch got old, unlike Sams "ladies".
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Re: Wack Jack RIP [Track 1]

Postby J.R. » Oct 11th, '11, 21:09

Hahaha thanks sam. Will work on the forced multis and bar length.

Thanks for the feed! :y:
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Re: Wack Jack RIP [Track 1]

Postby Atone » Oct 11th, '11, 22:26

this is a dope piece, love how your rhymin like your tellin a story from another person's view, thats pretty cool
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Re: Wack Jack RIP [Track 1]

Postby J.R. » Oct 12th, '11, 20:24

Bump
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