[Bonus Track 1] Life Worth Livin' Ft. Atone the Underdog

[J.R.]

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[Intro]
Let's try and make this life..
One, worth living,
Because inside of me..
I know that this beast is impossible to beat,
Now I'm going to rhyme on the beat and make it meet it's defeat...




(Verse- Atone the underdog)
I don't wanna be legendary and remembered in a cemetary
gettin burried, i wanna be known as a visionary
drivin to be livin scary and give em varies
of my life like i'm writin the pages
of my novel of an emcee courages
out of his cage and breakin down wall's
let my music be heard in the halls
til them angel's call and i close my eye's
say my final goodbyes
fly away and touch the skies
as long as i was able to live my life
the way i want and not follow a trend
swallow and grin
i refuse to be hollow and dim
i wanna be a leader and teach em
let me be reach em- just listen when i'm speakin
deep in- side the mind of a man so drivin
to be givin this life worth livin


[Verse 2- B.Nutz]
I'm not a Lost treasure, I Don't wanna be left behind,
Thinkin I won't effect people forever, That just decepts your mind,
People always talk about how I'm in a declenson,
It's getting deeper as I stall, Reffering to this depression,
Call me A-mon-Re , Cause My music is the center of your light,
Scared to fall, Because the sun is getting dimmer as I write,
Dared to call me intermittent, I'm getting thinner as I die,
I'm drilling my music into you, Call me a brace and bit,
I'm feeling a smooth image too, You better replay the shit
These people are be-wigged, just to hide their shame,
Cause these hick's forgot, Me and Atone run the game,
I wanna be in your Itunes, But We're the Underdogs,
Tired of hearing My blues? It's not like I'm Blunt at all
So let's make this a life worth living,
Cause when I die I don't want the hurt hidden..

[Sam.]

Atone the underdog
Decent freestyle type verse.The criticism that I would give you is try and maintain a proper Rhyme scheme for like 2 / 4 / 6 Bars.You were pretty inconsistent in this department.You're good lyrically but this is too simple to be conidered as dope.


B.Nutz
Prety much dope verse except at a place where you used same words to Rhyme for the sake of Multi.

Here.

Scared to fall, Because the sun is getting dimmer as I write,
Dared to call me intermittent, I'm getting thinner as I die,

The verse has some clever lines, like this one was witty.

Call me A-mon-Re , Cause My music is the center of your light,
Scared to fall, Because the sun is getting dimmer as I write,

[Atone]

Thanx sam,

[J.R.]

Thanx sam,

[SG.]

Decent verses from both you guys.

Atone, you started off well but the quality dipped after line 3. Still good though.

B.Nutz, your best verse off the LP so far. I agree with Sam on this one.

Feed back? viewtopic.php?f=24&t=131895

[J.R.]

Thanks Zabe.

[J.R.]

Bump

[Man1x]

B. Nutz shined on this one, Atone, I'm sorry but you got destroyed. B. Nutz, great everything. You had some lines were I wish I thought of that.

And I just noticed I'm in your sig.