Crying Over You

[chiasmus]

http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=131175&p=1790273#p1790273

There's too much shit going on in the world that we don't notice, try and lock away and block out, pretend it's not there, listen, yeah...

[Chorus]

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
(If you spoke to me)
You were my best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you...

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
You were our best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you..

[Verse 1]

See we living this life, like we living to die
Only mission on my mind is a vision to try
And bare shit goes on but we just turn a blind eye
I wanna try'n help, but by myself I just find I fall
But I'm sick being surrounded by it all
And not doing shit, Ima switch
If I have to see another chick hit by a man that's a fool
Blood I'm sick of redirecting all my punches to the wall.
Blood I'm so sick, with this shit Ima flip
Ima switch if I have to see another slit wrist
Of a teenage girl cos her world's been broke
And tried telling to her teacher bout the bullies they were pushing her around.
Two weeks later she got found
Legs hanging from a rope 2 feet from the ground
A pen on the desk with a note to her friends
At the funeral they wrote one back, and it said...

[Chorus]

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
(If you spoke to me)
You were my best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you...

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
You were our best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you..

[Verse 2]

Yo, and see that's just an example,
Of the things going on in the world that we turn our backs to
Anorexic girls getting thinner than matches
The fact is that beauty is the ugliest thing
It can change true beauty in the print of a magazine
Change everything that we have and dream
Real pure beauty is the thing that we haven't seen
Not even when we see Jenna Jameson on our tv screens
Sometimes I wish I could erase all the things that I've seen and heard
But I can't so I put it in a verse
But, words can't describe all the hurt that I find
You'd be hearing these four lines if you hadn't said bye...

[Chorus] x2

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
(If you spoke to me)
You were my best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you...

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
You were our best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you..

[Sam.]

You cant use that as a LOF,feed some piece from the Main CW Section like this one.
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=131175

[chiasmus]

Ok Ive done that http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=131175&p=1790273#p1790273

[ilovebender.com]

http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=131175&p=1790273#p1790273

There's too much shit going on in the world that we don't notice, try and lock away and block out, pretend it's not there, listen, yeah...

[Chorus]

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
(If you spoke to me)
You were my best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you...

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
You were our best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you..

[Verse 1]

See we living this life, like we living to die
Only mission on my mind is a vision to try
And bare shit goes on but we just turn a blind eye
I wanna try'n help, but by myself I just find I fall
But I'm sick being surrounded by it all
And not doing shit, Ima switch
If I have to see another chick hit by a man that's a fool
Blood I'm sick of redirecting all my punches to the wall.
Blood I'm so sick, with this shit Ima flip
Ima switch if I have to see another slit wrist
Of a teenage girl cos her world's been broke
And tried telling to her teacher bout the bullies they were pushing her around.
Two weeks later she got found
Legs hanging from a rope 2 feet from the ground
A pen on the desk with a note to her friends
At the funeral they wrote one back, and it said...

[Chorus]

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
(If you spoke to me)
You were my best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you...

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
You were our best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you..

[Verse 2]

Yo, and see that's just an example,
Of the things going on in the world that we turn our backs to
Anorexic girls getting thinner than matches
The fact is that beauty is the ugliest thing
It can change true beauty in the print of a magazine
Change everything that we have and dream
Real pure beauty is the thing that we haven't seen
Not even when we see Jenna Jameson on our tv screens
Sometimes I wish I could erase all the things that I've seen and heard
But I can't so I put it in a verse
But, words can't describe all the hurt that I find
You'd be hearing these four lines if you hadn't said bye...

[Chorus] x2

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
(If you spoke to me)
You were my best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you...

I would've give you everything you want,
I would've give you everything you need
You were our best friend, and that's the truth
And if you told me I wouldn't be crying over you..

Got dynamics in the song, going from soft to hard, like Ballad to Rock.

[Sam.]

You need a lot of practice mate.Work on the Rhyme and it's scheme man,some of the lines didn't have proper Rhyming at all.You need to learn to phrase your bars properly. The content is okay if delivered properly.