[Track 6] But It's My First Single!

[J.R.]

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[Intro]
Motherfuckers ain't taking this from me,
But...This is my first single!
So much for that.

[Verse 1]
I'm going to turn this dope, from a Wack track,
Try and hang me from a rope, Cause I'ma JackAss,
Fuck domino's, I don't roll I come Back fast,
This ain't a collab or my foes would Rap last,
Turn this shit off, before I fuck up this Annoying beat,
Call my Ass Nicki Minaj, Fuckers I'm Going Creep,
Big shoutout to the first site I wrote on! Rapbattles,
AKA, Watching guys getting fucked in the Crack assholes,
Oh shit bitch cunt Fuck, You want Content?
Little faggot ass, Shucks, I'm Beyond it,
Shady ain't the label, Aftermath ain't the stable,
You little babies Ima kick you over and laugh at the cradle,
This is Mad district,
Not mass physics,
So quit trying to out logic everyone and ether retards,
Before I make this time your last visit.
Oh shit you can't take this away,
This is my first single babe!

[Chorus]
And this was supposed to be my first single
But I just fucked that up so,
Fuck it, let's all have fun let's mingle
Slap a bitch and smack a ho
This was supposed to be my catchy little jingle
That you hear on your radio
But shit's about to hit the shingle


[Verse 2- sung]
Anddd my first single,
Is the one you wanna hear,
It's a parodddy,
That annoying beat will fuck up your ears,
This is not my first single,
But It's my first single! So don't take this away from me,
This is my jingle, So if you have to make fun of me.


[Outro]
I just took a bad track
and said nothing on it
and made it rhyme dope.
Faggots
OH well, it's practice..
Hate if you want!
HAhaah, Just kidding.
Joke track, But you know the rhymes aren't bad.

[Sam.]

The flow is way fucked up mate .IDK for some reason the style that you used here reminds me of YM.

Rhyming went off at many places....

Big shoutout to the first site I wrote on! Rapbattles,
AKA, Watching guys getting fucked in the Crack assholes,

There is too much stretching on the Rhymes there.

Overall after a good start the quality went down and down.Write your pieces at least twice man,it works.Not your best work mate.

[SG.]

Seems the wackness of My First Single is contagious. No disrespect to your skill, but this wasn't very good.

As Sam said, the flow's fucked, and the rhymes are really off. The problem with your recent tracks is that they seem to have plenty of content but flow and rhyming are semi-absent. Also, didn't you say the theme of your EP was horrorcore? This doesn't seem very horrific.

Now, this may sound obnoxious, but... feed back? viewtopic.php?f=24&t=132837

[Sam.]

Oh ! I forgot to add ,stop cussing so much for fuck sakes.