Let's Talk

[JamaicanPattlez]

I got it to flow with the beat. Again, your vocabulary's impressive and I enjoyed this piece. You gonna record this badboy? Oh, and feed me back, son! viewtopic.php?f=24&t=132974

[mdemaz]

Ok, here we go again.

Vocab is great, content is ok, use of metaphors is ok, lyrical structure is great.

Not your best work but as you said you had a lot of time outside, so it's understandable.

I won't hold that against you though, because you don't need to prove yourself really, I've seen you write some of the best shit on the forum.

[JamaicanPattlez]

That was quick, this was basically just...I dunno, practice with an easy flow and topic. Nothing extravagant. Did anyone get my Rick Ross punchline!?!?! haha.

JP, I'll check yours later tonight, I'm headin' out but I should be able to feed that later

Thanks both of y'all.

I gotchu. Yeah, I think I got it... the "seize the fly like a phenomenal boss" line?

[Man1x]

Great vocab, good, easy flow. But not your best work, it's understandable. I liked it. And I liked the Rick Ross line haahah

[Ka0t1c]

i like it bro, you have a real passion inside that needs to be presented. keep striving to better yourself, experiences and words. peace.

[Blu]

This is some good shit. The first few lines INSTANTLY reminded me of Marshall Mathers though.. haha, in a good way.

You had a Rick Ross line? I didn't even notice it!

Good shit though brah.

4.5/5 mics in the Source.

[Mr.DGAF]

Firstly, nice to see you writing again man, haven't seen you write in a while. Now, onto the piece:

Damn, this is really hot. Awesome choice of beat, I pretty much picked up the flow perfectly on the first listen, and that really impressed me. The topic was pretty good, and what you were talking about actually fit the style of the beat, at least that's what I think. The vocab is good, as always, that's never a problem for you though. This piece is nice, not your best work, but I really liked it.

Think you could hit up Geno and I's piece?

Eternal Nightmares

[Sam.]

You just started writing a few months I guess and you have evolved as a writer so much ?!! This shit is amazing and technically this is dope.

I can see you have observed and learned a lot form Gennette ,almost feels as if he wrote it. Keep at it bra

[Sam.]

Acts more like a motivational drive ?! Yeah !

Wish I wasn't lazy & fucked up all the time.

[Sam.]

Definitely a good thing when you say you don't wanna just focus on the Rhyme Scheme alone.The day you focus on what you actually wanna say in your verses, you grow as an Artist(Writer) faster. Keep that attitude bro.