Creative Control [Track 2- Hard Life]

[J.R.]

ATone LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=132965
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(Chorus)(Atone)
Been thru the worst of it all
tryin not to fall
gotta give it my best and stand up tall
gotta make it thru the fight
cuz the way we live, it's been a hard life

(Verse)(BNuts)
Worthless? I make you sick?
That hurts mom,, I'm Sick of your shit,
Walk outside, Throw my hoodie up and put an earphone in,
It's about time, Goodie, Fags are out, Queers moan then,
I hear "Faggot" Screamed from across the block,
Time to go at it, Deemed to Lock my stock,
Rhymes are static, Dreamed to take a shot,
Mine are drastic, Gleamed up then rocked,
Him in the jaw, Caused him to die, He shook,
Then the fall, Laws I can't oblige, Shit, book,
Run out, Then my group catches up with me,
Done now, When my dude messes up, to fuck with me
Got my head in the fight, Busted like Nutz,
Got 30 or so cuts tonight, Stiching em up

(Chorus)(BNuts)
Can't stay out of a fight,
Can't get out of this life,
Nothing seems right,
But It's time to be bright,
Look deep into the light..

(Verse)(Atone)
I aint gonna walk on egg shell's and hide from the pain
FUCK THAT, i made it thru hell and fought thru the shame
now i stand on this path and walk thru the rain
the devil aint gonna hold me down, can't keep me tame
i'm steady rockin gettin deadly so hot in the game
never got a chance to meet my real dad
but why should i give a fuck it wasn't that bad
without em i'm proud i got thru this life i had
the newspaper told me all about em, addicted to drugs
i'm better off, cuz i got a real family to love
and i aint out there, shootin it up with thugs
i don't need to pop shots to be where i am
hip hop aint just gangsta's and killa's you gotta understand
this music is poetic, being about to speak and hold on tight
cuz nothin comes easy and believe me when i say it's been a hard life

(Chorus)(Atone)

(Verse)(Bnuts)
I feel like everything is Bottled up,
I deal pain, Remorse? I have enough,
Well this Hard life, can be avoided if you play your Card's right,
But gleaming Shards lights, Help me make fun of retards fights,
Thinking oh how I was one of those, Could never catch a break,
Sinking into, How I could hit a hoe or How I could break a mate,
If only these people could see my Heart Hurts,
How lonely it is to be weeping and to Start worst,
of all My whole life is a train wreck of sadness
I use to Shove and fall, to the ground and that was traumatic,
But it's a hardlife, What am I gonna say..
My life is more on delay, than detox Dre..

(Chorus)(BNuts)

(Verse)(Atone)
I don't bottle nothin up i shatter the glass
let it all out and splatter my past
all over these tunes and add to the facts
growin up i was surrounded by things
hard times, gettin hounded by gangs
watchin shoot outs and drive by's, police chasin em
gettin jumped by punks, hard as hell facin em
memory's stuck in my head, no eracin em
i just put it in this music and let you hear it
i never gave up when i was gettin beat down, i came back with spirit
cuz if it aint killed me, it made me stronger, and i aint gonna fear it
FUCK Quitin mother fucker i'm in the front line
ready for whatever at any givin time
i been thru that market and paid that price
don't let anybody tell you this shit aint a hard life

[J.R.]

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[Mr.DGAF]

This is pretty good. Nutz' first verse is in my opinion the best verse on the whole song.

Rhymes are static, Dreamed to take a shot,
Mine are drastic, Gleamed up then rocked,

That's pretty solid man, I like the rhyme scheme. Not much to criticize on your part, you're getting far more consistent with your pieces.

Atone, I wasn't really feeling your first verse. I really liked the opening line, but then the rest of it kind of faltered. The rhyming at times was a tad simple, but that's not too bad I guess. Your second verse is good, the rhyming is on point and it flows well.

A nice drop from you guys, something really nice about this drop is your chemistry as a duo. Makes me look forward to your drops.

[J.R.]

Will reciprocate feed tomorrow, for anyone who gives it.

[Jdubem]

B. Nutz had two nice verses. I like the way you start out your first verse haha and you tell a story keeping that full line rhyming going the whole time pretty much until the end. Your second verse content was pretty different. You had another good start to it and I like these lines put together

Well this Hard life, can be avoided if you play your Card's right,
But gleaming Shards lights, Help me make fun of retards fights,
Thinking oh how I was one of those, Could never catch a break,
Sinking into, How I could hit a hoe or How I could break a mate

I would probably say that your first verse is best on here too, but the second holds it own.

And yeah first verse by Atone was pretty simple rhyming. The second verse was good especially the opening line

I don't bottle nothin up i shatter the glass
let it all out and splatter my past

Really liked that. Good shit.