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Geno - Divine Intervention

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Re: Geno - Divine Intervention

Postby Man1x » Nov 5th, '11, 03:48

Dope really flowed with the beat good bro, I gotta say good vocabulary as well. I liked that you also had a complex rhyme scheme. Only thing I can say is next time make it longer.
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Re: Geno - Divine Intervention

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Nov 5th, '11, 06:00

What the fuck, I JUST found this beat today! :angry: Haha. Cocksucker. Umm, honestly, I can't think of any criticism for it, dope. I'm jacking this beat though tbh. :whistle:
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Re: Geno - Divine Intervention

Postby Sam. » Nov 5th, '11, 15:27

Seems like you took the criticism well my :shifty: .

Like Menzo said, even I read it twice to catch the flow and Rhymes and shit, lol.At 1st I thought what the hell is this? Seriously, but when I did catch the whole thing it was nice as Boobs. If I’m not wrong there was a Tech N9ne reference at that start, dope-ish. :smoking:

I try my best to rhyme in text 'cause I'm not yet that audible

That’s actually clever of you to put some real personal thoughts in it instead of the usual bragging that is common. I’m not implying that you always brag in your verse but that’s a general criticism that I’m making. Although you did boast about yourself here but I won’t call that bragging because both represent different things.
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Re: Geno - Divine Intervention

Postby Sam. » Nov 5th, '11, 16:04

Geno wrote:Thanks, glad you think I improved on what you thought was lacking or out of place in previous pieces. :y:

And I'm always influenced by Tech lol.

Yeah! I knew.
Tech does teaches you something,props.
& pardon me for being so weird in giving feed.
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