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Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Spyder » Nov 7th, '11, 19:20

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=133144 - LOF

single off A New Breed of Beast that drops friday, make sure to leave detailed feed and check it
friday :y:


Geno
I paint visual images with sinister rituals
A sinner is still a fool if beginnin' without the tools,
It's a vicious reciprocal when all the blood spatters,
It takes a tough bastard to say I'm less than above average,
Think it don't, but it does matter, I'll have your face to the wall,
You'll be raped in withdrawal, if you a male or you not,
You're failin' to stop me switchin' blades with my cock,
So you can say bye to God, and bathe my assault,
Yeah salt in the wound as I'm cloggin' a broom,
In your grand-momma's womb, just killin' the lady,
Now I'm ticked so don't make me get off with a fuse.
I'm positive you, just don't know what to make of this,
It's crazy when I say this and you're makin' friends in Hades den,
With fading ends your face is red from backhanded Satan fists,
So you play with it, practice A to Z, crumple up the pages then,
You say the shit that makes your kids all wake up dead.

Hook - Geno
'Cause I get violent, sliced from a vice grip,
Trucks with the sirens on nights when it's like this,
Dying inside in spite of a psych trip,
It's why I get by with my life, and I like this.

Spyder
I step and let the anger consume, come bangin saloon
This songs sang til your doom when I hang ya platoon,
Til your fleets deceased and bodies sank into tombs
Remain the only man on the planet after I strangle the moon.
Most feared competitor in the universe after I use a verse,
Ancient, flagrant, neanderthal-ic mayhem and the newest curse
Drop protools, believe me its hopless, what I do absurd.
Chop vocals leavin you throatless ‘for you could spew your words.
I battle in an infirmary, you sweat when I spit a verse or discussion
Rhymes so hot you cant stomach em, thus internal combustion.
You see the story that what I speak is gory, your need for glory… um
Ends with your breathin poorly, gaspin from in the crematorium.
Now he is surely done, unmatchable are my fits of violence
Landin me in asylums, but here I come this tyrant,
Been enraged by then men who say they claimin center stage
Shit my vemon slay they weapons til every sentence spayed.

Hook –Spyder
Cause I get violent, chew through crews like cannibals
Bottle your soul swallow you whole, detach my mandible
Like a snake, then open my mouth to hear your cry fits
Its how I get by with my life, and I like this.
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Re: Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Spyder » Nov 7th, '11, 21:27

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Re: Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Sam. » Nov 7th, '11, 21:52

Geno
This is indeed a dope verse, no doubt son. This verse had lot's of up and down's and believe me some of the things that you did (I've talked about them later in the feed), overshadows them to a certain extent. There were some amazing punches and word play in there and they were pretty clever.

It takes a tough bastard to say I'm less than above average,

Take this line for instance. That’s a good punch line right there, it took time for me completely decipher even though I understood it with the 1st read.

You're failin' to stop me switchin' blades with my cock,
So you can say bye to God, and bathe my assault,


Nice wordplay/Punch here. Blades and cock both can make a bitch bleed, lmaooo at me saying this, but yeah, that's the point of the whole bar I guess, bathe in the blood due to the assault.

Yeah salt in the wound as I'm cloggin' a broom,
In your grand-momma's womb, just killin' the lady,


The Rhyming and the content is too Eminem~ish don't you think?

You'll be raped in withdrawal, if your a male or not,

Seems better this way, correct me if I'm wrong.

The content seems a little repetitive; I mean you could have said something different. Overall I liked it.

Spyder
I’ll start of by applauding your imaginary that you used for this verse; I could actually imagine few lines in my mind. There were punches all over the verse, no doubt, that’s your specialty. Technically speaking I don’t even need to say where you need to improve because you left no flaw that I could pick up and critic. Maybe…well there is some thing I can say, I know you wrote this so you can flow with it correctly but it was off for me at places (The 4th bar [7-8 Line] lol in particular).Till now I was saying that using big words hampers the flow, but that’s not the case with your verse, the inner Rhymes that you used counter balanced it well. The only problem is for the people who don’t understand the meaning of those words, I would still suggest you use some simple words.



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Re: Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Man1x » Nov 7th, '11, 22:07

What's this one mean?:

It takes a tough bastard to say I'm less than above average
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Re: Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Sam. » Nov 7th, '11, 22:24

Man1x wrote:What's this one mean?:

It takes a tough bastard to say I'm less than above average

Average.
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Re: Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Spyder » Nov 7th, '11, 22:47

thanks sam for the nice feed bro :worship:


@man1x.

hes saying it takes a crazy man to say he isnt good.
less than above average. :y:
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Re: Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Man1x » Nov 8th, '11, 00:03

That's what I thought, the Sam put it I thought it had a deeper meaning
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Re: Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Mr.DGAF » Nov 8th, '11, 01:18

Very good peice guys, but dang man, Spyder impresses the fuck out of me. And that's not to say that Geno didn't come nice, because you did man. Your multi game is on point, and you didn't sacrifice the topic at all. And like Sam quoted, that above average line was pretty clever. But there's something really impressive about Spyder's verse on this. I dunno, technically, it's pretty much flawles.

This was a very impressive collab, very impressive indeed.
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Re: Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Spyder » Nov 8th, '11, 01:27

thanks for all the feed. recognize the ep is gonna be filled with shit like this :y:

and @Sam

you actually brought up your own topic of syllable count, the way you revised it, it no longer has the same
multi count as the previous line, making it a broken multi. yes it sounds better if you were to say it alone. because as it is it sounds to have too many syllables. but the original way keeps the multi count and in audio would keep the flow :y:
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Re: Spyder ft Geno - Violent

Postby Sam. » Nov 8th, '11, 12:07

Spyder wrote:thanks for all the feed. recognize the ep is gonna be filled with shit like this :y:

and @Sam

you actually brought up your own topic of syllable count, the way you revised it, it no longer has the same
multi count as the previous line, making it a broken multi. yes it sounds better if you were to say it alone. because as it is it sounds to have too many syllables. but the original way keeps the multi count and in audio would keep the flow :y:

I thought so. :y:
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