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will you remember me

Postby Spyder » Jan 17th, '12, 22:00

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I never once gave up, I hope you recognize it
I admit I almost quit from how hard im fuckin tryin.
Migraine from the thunderin, you claim to have my number n’
I finally figured out that you came with all this sufferin,
Im strugglin, tryin to make a name but you smothered it
I hate that I cannot tame what im up against.
Been a lot of pain, ill still bend til im broken
Said a lot of lines, you pretend I never spoke them.
Go unnoticed, aim kick it into gear when I bust
And you didn’t even notice when I switch lyricism up!
I could sit with this pen, addict practice for days
Ready to evolve, and get past this battling stage.
You laugh in my face, on greats you never mention me
Your list is shit, this is not what I expected see,
So ill stay underground and watch others live it up,
Spit with sickest delivery, show you what you givin up!


I kept callin your name though you never heard of mine
If your not ballin for fame then we don’t deserve your time?
I murder rhymes, and you slither away so serpentine
You and your rhyme book don’t fuckin deserve a spine!
Three long years I’ve played with this, relationship
And today, I’m bout to walk away and quit!
I can’t take this shit, you bow and praise my spit
But go to someone else and then make him rich?
I was bendin my back so bad with the pen and this pad
You received every ounce of attention I had.
I never guessed this would hap-pen,
All the stress that im havin was expressed through this rappin,
You made me an addict, instigated and babied my habit
Gave me rap like crack til I caved in and had it.
But I embrace how you acted cause its made me strong
And gave me enough passion to lash and make this song!


I would sit in my class and pay attention to you,
And write rhymes the whole time til the lesson was through.
Cause you were different man, and I guess so was I
But you’re the fuckin reason for my lack of social life.
I don’t know why, just couldn’t stay away from your words
But when I couldn’t sleep you were just makin it worse.
You took advantage, its simple crook you planned this
Til u were all I had and you can tell from the look im damaged.
Then you left me, I was standin with hands empty
Solo abandoned but ill be damned if you tempt me!
I thought, maybe I should start writin a track or two
And use what you showed me to get back at you.
The fact is true, you were the one to show me the way
But only today, ill rise and leave your poetry slayed.
Be with your new crew cause im out to better the game,
After this track, im confident that youll remember my name.
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Re: will you remember me

Postby Spyder » Jan 17th, '12, 23:19

hmmmmm

idk :'(
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Re: will you remember me

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jan 18th, '12, 22:54

I really like this a lot man. This is what I've been waiting to see, you've really stepped out of the comfort zone for this one, and it worked. The lyrics are nice man, I'll check the audio here soon and feed that as well. The wordplay and punches are still there, and done well, but they aren't the focal point of this track, and I like that. The topic has been done before, but you still do it well enough to make it very nice. The lyrics are solid man, the flow is great and the multies are smooth. Nice job breh.
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Re: will you remember me

Postby Spyder » Jan 19th, '12, 19:25

thanks for the peep man much appreciated
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