JamaicanPattlez ft. J.R. - On Some Ill Shit

[JamaicanPattlez]

JP LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=142727&p=1843046#p1843046
J.R. LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=142650

JP Verse:

I'm called the Hip Hop Taylor Swift,
Try to piss me off, and you'll look like a major bitch,
Kids with a cheap mic think they're living Pac's life,
Some advice for you *****, getting to Heaven's a long ride,
You're lacking, so start practicin' your rhymes, you kiddin' me?
I'm practically an African child who never eats,
Just imagine the masterin' of time, who'd ever sleep?
Cause I'm back in battle of life, and the truth never leaves,
Shit, I've got a big stomach, that's why I sound so hungry,
I bet my problem isn't something that I can clown and be so funny,
I could walk into an orphanage with a dollar and a dream,
And mock a new mourning kid with a father and some glee,
I could diss you with subliminals and hit you with somethin' literal,
But the issue is hypocritical, cause I rhyme lyrical and spiritual,
And think the shit's original, but in the minute you find a miracle,
Your wit's now in the critical, cause I've driven a hidden spear in y'all.

J.R. Verse:
Hidden blades, Hidden Knives, Hidden lies,
Frontin me is a good way to get slit and die,
Fighting over shit is america's forbiddin' right,
I don't gotta hide from this, I'll just get rid of guys,
Think you dope? You ain't got a clue what dope means,
Like a rope and tree, you'll choke, is what I'm hoping.
Your only idea of a life is in the sims 3,
Us in a fight? You know who'll win- me,
See I'm just trying not to be offending,
but gee, its my limits people be bending,
And now I'ma spend the last lines of this shit,
saying like dat ass? yo, It's mine you can kiss.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Nah, J.R. came to me asking for a verse and then when I finished it, it turned into my track suddenly without me knowing. Idunno, I guess take it for what it is.

[J.R.]

Nah, J.R. came to me asking for a verse and then when I finished it, it turned into my track suddenly without me knowing. Idunno, I guess take it for what it is.

This. Minus the you knowing track. I asked you for I think two collabs, and then said we could do one of them first. Decided it was gonna be your choosing, then we'd do mine. NahImean?

[JamaicanPattlez]

Nah, J.R. came to me asking for a verse and then when I finished it, it turned into my track suddenly without me knowing. Idunno, I guess take it for what it is.

This. Minus the you knowing track. I asked you for I think two collabs, and then said we could do one of them first. Decided it was gonna be your choosing, then we'd do mine. NahImean?

Haha. Yeah, it's cool doe.

[Blu]

You two have talent, you can write some pretty decent verses.

But, I don't want to see "decent" verses from two talented writers.

Give me something else, give me something I've never seen on this site.
Lets drop the whole "I'm a tough guy, I'll kill you" rhymes, and lets pick up on the story behind the rhymes. It's a good piece.

I'm practically an African child who never eats,

Explain that line to me, I don't get it.

[J.R.]

My last 7 verses have been typed. This one, on pen and pad. I think i do better there..

[JamaicanPattlez]

You two have talent, you can write some pretty decent verses.

But, I don't want to see "decent" verses from two talented writers.

Give me something else, give me something I've never seen on this site.
Lets drop the whole "I'm a tough guy, I'll kill you" rhymes, and lets pick up on the story behind the rhymes. It's a good piece.

I'm practically an African child who never eats,

Explain that line to me, I don't get it.

Haha, thank you. Again, I didn't really think of a concept, so I guess that style's just my writing default. But yeah, I feel you. And yeah, that line meant I'm hungry.

Very good stuff I've seen some of your verse before JP, I really like how it turned out. On some real ish on this one, this was probably the funniest line:

"But the issue is hypocritical, cause I rhyme lyrical and spiritual,
And think the shit's original, but in the minute you find a miracle"

Because it's so true

@ J.R, that was a GREAT improvement from your previous work. Your flow was steady and your rhymes fit well and you got your point across, I really liked it and hope to see more of this from you in the future.

Good effort overall homies.

Yeah, word eh? J.R. really stepped it up this time around. I'm impressed by his piece this time around.

[J.R.]

Thanks to y'all, and to JP for the props.


JP still killed me though.

Oh well. JR Ft. JP coming soon lol.

We should do more shit like this imo.

[Atone]

Pettles, good verse, who you takin shots at in your verse tho?

I could walk into an orphanage with a dollar and a dream,
And mock a new mourning kid with a father and some glee,

that line made me laugh


J.R, i seen u do better, this was kinda hard to read cuz i couldn't catch on to your flow like your others,

if you ever seen that Katt Williams comedy where at the end of the show they do a concert with Da Brat coming out, your 1st few lines remind me of her flow

[JamaicanPattlez]

Pettles, good verse, who you takin shots at in your verse tho?

I could walk into an orphanage with a dollar and a dream,
And mock a new mourning kid with a father and some glee,

that line made me laugh


J.R, i seen u do better, this was kinda hard to read cuz i couldn't catch on to your flow like your others,

if you ever seen that Katt Williams comedy where at the end of the show they do a concert with Da Brat coming out, your 1st few lines remind me of her flow

Thanks bro. Nobody in particular, lol. Whenever I don't really have a specific topic at mind, I always write in this way. Lmao, writing auto-pilot.