Outcast Edit v.2

[Words]

(I'm re-posting this because I added a new verse/made changes/it will be on WMD. I don't have a beat for this yet, but that's coming soon.)

This kind of paints the whole picture of why WorDs exists. He's born out of this detest of the people that have bullied me growing up. He acts like a more confident voice to speak out against the shit that they've done.

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Verse 1-
Why am I that guy? That one odd man out
Who because of you, I always have doubt
about anything and everything, in my mind.
Why is it that, you never seem to return my kind?
When its time to be nice, there is no time,
It's the motto, the slogan that you live by
It makes me rip hair from head, and scream why
And I cannot fit in, no matter how hard I try.
Like fire, or parasite burning and eating inside
me everyday every night when I sleep
at lunch when I sit alone, just try'n to eat
Creeps in my mind, seeps through causes blind
Don't you know? Creating insanity is impolite?
Why can't you just read and believe my distress
realize all this anxiety and all the social unrest
Within me. All I ask is for you to be a cunt less.

Chorus-
I'm an outcast, it's what I'm meant to be
I'm an outcast, it's what you made me
I'm an outcast, it's what my title reads
I'm an outcast, aren't you proud? Now lemme be.

Verse 2-
"Just tell an adult, things will be alright."
Fuck that, it won't help me sleep tonight.
When my head hits the pillow- my mind starts racing
Thinking about all the shit that happened to Casey
That's when WorDs comes out and helps me get to sleep:
"Fuck em all, just kill this verse over a beat next week.
Show em that your not weak no matter how deep their hate seeps.
Don't worry about shit Casey, just leave this to me."
This is crazy, they just apparently wanna fuck with me.
Seems to me I can't be normal no matter how much I wanna be.
"We'll stuff your fat-ass in a locker and then just uppercut you.
Your mom doesn't love you, she wishes you'd just eat less food"
WorDs simply putting in the back of my mind, just tell them "STFU!"

Chorus-
I'm an outcast, it's what I'm meant to be
I'm an outcast, it's what you made me
I'm an outcast, it's what my title reads
I'm an outcast, aren't you proud? Now lemme be.

Verse 3-
I tried to fit in with the rest of em, really I did.
It never worked, so I took my handed and folded it
Well shit now, how bout I leave doubt and go all in?
You're all a bunch of ass-backward plastic bastards
Get'n beat-up by this heat-up spastic half-nerd.
You deserve it too. For stew'n this evil brew
Leave me dude, cause you know it's the truth.
Finally it seems that Casey's been peeled.
WorDs from his shell, revealed to be real.
You did it, by all those times you ignored me
All those times you laughed and destroyed me
Well hell with that, now you go and goad me?
I could be anything, nobody should have told me.
Cause now I'll be a nightmare- no longer try and be a friend
Cold shoulder I won't care- if we ever meet or ever see again.
And I'll carry that shit with me, all the way through the end.

Chorus-
I'm an outcast, it's what I'm meant to be
I'm an outcast, it's what you made me
I'm an outcast, it's what my title reads
I'm an outcast, aren't you proud? Now lemme be.
Outcast....

[Words]

bumping

[Enimee]

js, this is by all standards a seemingly perfect verse tbh... your structure throughout was incredible. your rhyme schemes werent boring and you put alot of emotion into which (thanks to your development) was easily perceived

the only thing i would like to see you try more on your next peice like this is wordplay. i think if you could add a couple word-twists, make a play off a double definition or something and ill think youll be good

all an d all

keep at it i really like this style