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Postby JamaicanPattlez » Feb 10th, '12, 08:12

I guess stress can test you to prove what you can do,
Unless meth tends to help you, so who used to do it too?
And now I'm just playing an insane game with fate,
But am I safe to wait in this place for my taste of fame?
I just stay in my own lane, today I pray I get a shot,
But I make my plate of fate, and I'm saying I will not,
Quit 'till I get to where I've been dreaming all my life,
So just sit n' still bitch while I keep scheming like a child,
I'll probably stop talking when my tonsils grow back,
And when a fag gets mad hostile when I laugh, it's so sad,
I'm an asshole so I know what's like to spout some shit,
Like that matters, I'm here for light talk and to roundhouse a bitch,
My words start controversy, yet unnerved I stand so firmly,
My verse may cause to burn scenes, but I'm unsure if that's really from me,
I'm here to scream in your ear, strike fear and act repugnant,
Give evil leers at queers, oh dear, are you having fun yet?

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Re: Random Verse.

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Feb 10th, '12, 08:47

Nah, I get you. Damn, I thought I had something going here! Well, that's why we give feedback. :P

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My words start controversy, yet unnerved I stand so firmly,
My verse may cause to burn scenes, but I'm unsure if that's really from me,"

Idunno, how I wrote it, I got it to rhyme for me. :confusion: Maybe my particular way of saying it was different? I have no idea, lol.

For the "Cause to burn scenes" part, I tried to say it like: my words can destroy a scenery. Idunno, you're making me doubt myself man. :laughing: Hmm. Anything else dude?
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Re: Random Verse.

Postby Blu » Feb 10th, '12, 09:05

"My verse may lead to burn scenes" would've worked a tad bit better.

Up to the line "Quit 'till I get to where I've been dreaming all my life," you seemed to be going with a nice theme, then after that you changed the subject.

& tbh, the whole I'm-such-an-asshole-to-gay-people talk is getting played out. I haven't read all your pieces, but the ones I have read, there's a line about gay people, or just using "faggot". I don't take it offensive, it just gets boring after a while.

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Re: Random Verse.

Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 13th, '12, 07:46

nah, wasn't feeling it, throw away, throw away!!!!!!
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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