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The Note

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The Note

Postby Doodlebug » Jul 17th, '12, 15:21

I know its not rap but I wanted to share. I wrote this because a friend of my daughter was very blue.. I gave my girls some money, took them all to the mall for them to catch a movie, dine.. & just... have fun. I wrote it in my car - waiting for them.. no edits:

I later found a piece of music to illustrate and do multimedia to. (I used to be an illustrator) the art/animation is an old sheet of torn paper with the words being written on it and fading - then rewriting the next line.

Music I am going to animate it to: http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/151445

The Note

I'll make them sorry
there nothing more to say...

Pen and paper
hands trembling

Pain beyond belief
sorrow beyond words

An emptiness I can no longer live with...



Day to day
guttural despair

I seem to all
a faded memory

A ghost to many
loved by only a few

And it’s like I just want them to realize
need for them to feel
the loss of me


In my mind
it’s so very simple

In a moment being
the next not

But this decision
is so hasty

born of a deep sadness
something my soul just cannot shake


Please see my pain
stop my tears

Hold me close
say no words

Just keep my hand
from completing
this note

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>> call me Deb...
We are the children of pain.... educated by hurt..." - Deb
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Re: The Note

Postby Sam. » Jul 17th, '12, 22:21

If anyone is asked to go on stage and say something about themselves, in short, it would be some what like this. Just a few simple words, yet they speak in great volumes. Great work, I loved it.
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Re: The Note

Postby Sam. » Jul 18th, '12, 20:26

Geno wrote:Definitely something I haven't seen in Creative Writing before. Interesting. Keep it up man. :y:

Word. She's bringing the wind of change in this section.
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