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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I go

Postby Emadyville » Jul 24th, '12, 05:10

Um...

Holy fuckin shit you guys both brought straight, absolute fire in the rhymes (especially, shit was nuts), the flow, and the content. Nothing else to say but DAMN!

What stood out with wreck for rhymes:

far from grace, feels like my brain's starting to carbonate
all satan asks from me for now is an arm & a leg
throw in a limb as a bonus, oh & I'm sorry to say

and

I picture God as the opposite, "oh shit, did I just witness an apocolypse?"

Wreck the flow was dope on this:

all satan asks from me for now is an arm & a leg
throw in a limb as a bonus, oh & I'm sorry to say

Geno for rhymes:

I'm a walkin' anonymous sight, so slender and ominous like,

and

Then stamped as a person of crime, branded and burned at the sight,
"This man isn't worth any time, I damn him a curse on his life"

And with flow geno this stood out:

Wantin' to fly but my wings were snipped from my fingertips,
Still lingerin' is the strength in my chest, now relinquish it,
Picture this, a little more attention for this penmenship,
Your sole purpose is soul service, but I ain't sellin' it,


Goddamn guys dope piece :worship:
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Emadyville » Jul 24th, '12, 05:14

Geno wrote:Thanks a lot Emady! Did you get the Slender reference? :shifty:


not till now, you hid it in there lol, fuckin dope, but one of those no one will honestly catch unless they play the game all the damn time :sweating:

seriously tho, you both were fuckin sick :worship:
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Emadyville » Jul 24th, '12, 05:18

you complimented each other with styles, format, and rhyming even tho you both rhymed insane. even the content was different but perfectly fitting.
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Robbie G » Jul 24th, '12, 05:19

I liked both of them lyrically.

The only criticism I would have it that I had a hard time finding a flow with Geno's part that worked....but maybe it's just me. :sweating:
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Emadyville » Jul 24th, '12, 05:20

Robbie G wrote:I liked both of them lyrically.

The only criticism I would have it that I had a hard time finding a flow with Geno's part that worked....but maybe it's just me. :sweating:


read his shit a little slower, it took longer for me too but its there :y:
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I go

Postby Wreck » Jul 24th, '12, 05:24

Emadyville wrote:Um...

Holy fuckin shit you guys both brought straight, absolute fire in the rhymes (especially, shit was nuts), the flow, and the content. Nothing else to say but DAMN!

What stood out with wreck for rhymes:

far from grace, feels like my brain's starting to carbonate
all satan asks from me for now is an arm & a leg
throw in a limb as a bonus, oh & I'm sorry to say

and

I picture God as the opposite, "oh shit, did I just witness an apocolypse?"

Wreck the flow was dope on this:

all satan asks from me for now is an arm & a leg
throw in a limb as a bonus, oh & I'm sorry to say

Geno for rhymes:

I'm a walkin' anonymous sight, so slender and ominous like,

and

Then stamped as a person of crime, branded and burned at the sight,
"This man isn't worth any time, I damn him a curse on his life"

And with flow geno this stood out:

Wantin' to fly but my wings were snipped from my fingertips,
Still lingerin' is the strength in my chest, now relinquish it,
Picture this, a little more attention for this penmenship,
Your sole purpose is soul service, but I ain't sellin' it,


Goddamn guys dope piece :worship:


:worship: Thank you kind sir, we tried our best, we originally had a different way we were going to go with our 2nd collab here, but I found this beat right before we talked about the 2nd collab, wrote to it, had this strange, creepy, sick feel to it, like hell, or something of that sort, & it came out great. Thoroughly enjoyed doing this too :y:.

Emadyville wrote:Seriously tho, you both were fuckin sick :worship:


Thanks again man, appreciate the feed, & the love :y:.

Emadyville wrote:you complimented each other with styles, format, and rhyming even tho you both rhymed insane. even the content was different but perfectly fitting.


:D Thank you, we tried. A storytelling record I think is easily as dope, if not way better, than just a lyrical record, so yeah, I was definitely satisfied w/ the outcome of this.

Robbie G wrote:I liked both of them lyrically.


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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Emadyville » Jul 24th, '12, 05:25

^ yeah man be proud, you both killed that shit, loved how you entered with the shorter feel and rhymes and picked it up but kept the dope multis, fuckin loved it, cant say any more about it bro haha
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Emadyville » Jul 24th, '12, 05:30

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Emadyville wrote:^ yeah man be proud, you both killed that shit, loved how you entered with the shorter feel and rhymes and picked it up but kept the dope multis, fuckin loved it, cant say any more about it bro haha

Yeah he had a little room for an intro before his verse and killed that too haha. Crazy rhymes.


i really wish this was recorded tbh
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Wreck » Jul 24th, '12, 05:38

Emadyville wrote:^ yeah man be proud, you both killed that shit, loved how you entered with the shorter feel and rhymes and picked it up but kept the dope multis, fuckin loved it, cant say any more about it bro haha


Thanks a ton man, really appreciate it, you have no idea :y:. & yeah, I started out thinking "ok, let's build this up slow, in the perfect way, but I didn't want to change the feel/style of it too much, just the syllables.

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Emadyville wrote:^ yeah man be proud, you both killed that shit, loved how you entered with the shorter feel and rhymes and picked it up but kept the dope multis, fuckin loved it, cant say any more about it bro haha

Yeah he had a little room for an intro before his verse and killed that too haha. Crazy rhymes.


i really wish this was recorded tbh


I'm down to do that, gotta check w/ Geno as well, I think he's working on his audio shit, if my memory serves me correct, but he can definitely clarify that if I'm wrong.

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Emadyville wrote:^ yeah man be proud, you both killed that shit, loved how you entered with the shorter feel and rhymes and picked it up but kept the dope multis, fuckin loved it, cant say any more about it bro haha

Yeah he had a little room for an intro before his verse and killed that too haha. Crazy rhymes.


:y: haha thanks bro.
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Sam. » Jul 24th, '12, 23:18

This has really, by far, exceeded my expectations. I though that this would some what like Eminem's, but I was proven wrong. I liked Wrecks execution of the topic more, the imagination that wreck had, took the cake. Plus, he did it with the precision of some dope rhyming. Geno, on the other hand, definitely has some dope rhymes, like always, but the content lagged just a little bit in compared to wreck. Geno also has the advantage of proper vocab. The rhyming on the last bar reminded me of Almost famous. Good shit, you guys are a nice writing pair.
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Wreck » Jul 24th, '12, 23:42

Geno wrote:Updated it with a spoken part after my verse tying into the hook. It didn't land exactly on the piano and I'm a perfectionist lol. :y:


:y: I was thinking the same thing, there was a ton of instrumental left, so I think that was a good idea to fill that in.

Sam. wrote:This has really, by far, exceeded my expectations. I though that this would some what like Eminem's, but I was proven wrong. I liked Wrecks execution of the topic more, the imagination that wreck had, took the cake. Plus, he did it with the precision of some dope rhyming. Geno, on the other hand, definitely has some dope rhymes, like always, but the content lagged just a little bit in compared to wreck. Geno also has the advantage of proper vocab. The rhyming on the last bar reminded me of Almost famous. Good shit, you guys are a nice writing pair.


Thank you sir for the feed & kind words, yeah I think we make a good duo, it aint over yet though til the fat lady sings, more stuff coming. Thanks again Sam. & yeah, I tried to tie it in/put it in people's heads, the topic, from the get go, so I'm glad you understood that :y:.
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Sam. » Jul 24th, '12, 23:50

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Thank you sir for the feed & kind words, yeah I think we make a good duo, it aint over yet though til the fat lady sings, more stuff coming. Thanks again Sam. & yeah, I tried to tie it in/put it in people's heads, the topic, from the get go, so I'm glad you understood that :y:.

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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Sam. » Jul 25th, '12, 00:24

Geno wrote:Eminem's? What? lol. This isn't an Em beat, and he didn't have a song called Everywhere I Go as far as I know. :sweating:

I recommend endin' it with a letter to next-of-kin,
But heaven nor hell is where I'm restin' so guess again...

I fumbled, I meant Underground. The Rhymes at the end reminded me of it.

Geno wrote:The "topic" wasn't really a specific topic. It was basically talking about heaven / hell in whatever sense you wanted to. My verse uses heaven and hell (mainly hell) in relation to writing and being appreciated, selling your soul for fame, which ties back in with Wreck's intro / verse "am I wrong to think hell is so great?" Hell being the fame and fortune. That's why my chorus at the end mentions "limbo", a state in which someone who's just died is awaiting to go to heaven or hell, and since I'm not famous that represents me.

My bad. :facepalm I did get a whiff of the way you had written this, but never realized that it was so deep. I'm sorry for the mis-interpretation. I'm reading it again after posting this comment to do full justice to your efforts and creativity.
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Wreck » Jul 25th, '12, 00:48

Sam. wrote:
Wreck wrote:
Thank you sir for the feed & kind words, yeah I think we make a good duo, it aint over yet though til the fat lady sings, more stuff coming. Thanks again Sam. & yeah, I tried to tie it in/put it in people's heads, the topic, from the get go, so I'm glad you understood that :y:.

Spoonfull?


No, it's too deep & dope to spill even a little, not a lyrical track, but it is lyrical. & unfinished.
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Re: Geno ft. Wreck - Everywhere I Go

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jul 25th, '12, 02:20

Good rhymes folks.

Wreck, the structuring confuses me on the first 4 lines or so man. It seems like those could just as easily be shortened into just 2 lines. It doesn't effect the flow or anything, just... weird to look at. But the rhyming was really nice. I wasn't feeling the yellow puss line, seemed like filler. I got what you were doing with the line, but I think that sounds too unproffesional. The gas/break line was nice, but I also feel that it could have been worded better. Other than that, good verse.

Geno, rhymes were nice, as always. I really liked the way they were placed in this, the sole purpose rhyme in particular. Most lines were nice, I don't really have any complaints.
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