Eedee - LUI (TR Shady Tape #6)

[Eedee]

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=147121

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g_b29SNzUWs

Eedee - LUI (Living Under the Influence)


[Intro] (:01)
Ayo, what do you when...
Someone's life is controlled by drugs?
How are they holding up?
When they're smoking stuff...
Don't go poking fun, help 'em fix their broken lungs.
They need a golden touch.
You don't want them to go limp in your arms, do ya?

[Chorus] (:20)
When the smoke goes up that when we all stand up,
There's safety in numbers and it's THAT they can't touch.
But sadness is cancer and the opposite's the remedy,
Keep your head up because we're calling it the enemy. (x2)

[Verse 1] (:40)
You'll see what I mean when you're sitting, relaxing,
The whole world is up and they'll be getting to action.
When you're pissed and you can't stand, your mission to act can
And probably will become a picture of CAT scans.
That looks like a Rorschach, your noodle's on tarmac,
Cooking the core vat of lucrative "bar-smack.
Yeah motherfucker, it's my home-grown brew,
Oh, don't go, you! You're leaving oh so soon.
And when you smoke those too and drink that hobo's booze,
You'll turn into a dancer wearing go-go boots.
You slow poke fool, juice and yo-yo's, pools,"
And a period of nothing after 'no, coke's cool!'
Standing on a dock, is it bad for the better?
With 50 others, that peer just can't take the pressure.
When it all pops off the I.Q. drops off, "I'm the -
Wait, what? I fucking think my dude got lost." (find him!)

[Chorus] (1:20)

[Verse 2] (1:40)
You're prancing in fields while you're cancerous deal
Is slowly creeping up and so your answer is pills.
Pills, pills, the more pills that you take,
The more pills that you want, the more your children's at stake.
Where the fuck are they now, asshole? Sitting at home?
While you're out getting smashed, bitch, they're frickin' alone.
"But it's a blast, kid! Hey, listen and grow-"
Fuck your stupid fucking ass, shit, the sticks and the stones.
They can't hurt you, but those things in your hand can,
You look like you're gonna heave, here, have a trash bag.
Aren't you glad that you have a friend so close?
"He broke Ben's whole nose!" and when this ends, go home.
And since you start to heave, now you can hardly breathe,
All this shit you fuckers do could probably awe Charlie Sheen.
"Dude is the best" while it affects you in the chest,
Just be safe, I don't wanna go to your funeral next.

[Chorus] (2:19)

[Sam.]

Lol! The 1st verse is so young money, I mean, technically it's better, but the presentation of the whole verse reminded me of them. The 1st verse is really casual, then you suddenly twisted the mood, and made it more vicious and deep. I was really surprised that you did that, I expected the same tone throughout. But, who says we can't switch things, hunh? I think the Multies of the 2nd verse was better, the words that you used were really marvelous. The flow was really good, commanding, aggressive. I like how you drop 2-3 verses everytime, makes me feel like a waste.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Damn homie this was great! I could relate to this one lol, the multis are awesome and you kept them consistent throughout the whole thing, as usual very nice flow and great vocabulary, this was a great piece man keep it up!!

P.S. I'll be hitting you up for a collab within the next month! just trying to get to know my program and a mic stand, sheesh you kind of make me feel bad I havent written in a long time and know I cant get on it like that! although I never could lol, just takes practice, Keep it up homie!! Great job

[Eedee]

The 1st verse is so young money,

Thanks for the feed

@Shady Thanks man, I appreciate it. I'm ordering a new mic for college (I'm leaving for college the 26th. So it might be a while after that [few days] before I get all settled in and can record ) but yes. We shall collab.

[Sam.]

Lol, what's wrong? I even said it was better, now what? What else do you want me to say?

[Eedee]

Lol, what's wrong? I even said it was better, now what? What else do you want me to say.

It was a joke, chillax haha. I know what you said

Thanks for the good looks

[Innovation]

Great work. This is a pretty good concept and you executed it well.

I particularly liked this part of your second verse:

And since you start to heave, now you can hardly breathe,
All this shit you fuckers do could probably awe Charlie Sheen.
"Dude is the best" while it affects you in the chest,
Just be safe, I don't wanna go to your funeral next.

The writing throughout your work was impressive. Your second verse was the strongest in my opinion. That's not to say the first verse was weak, because it wasn't.

Although I do think the "Ben's whole nose!" multi was a little bit forced.

Aren't you glad that you have a friend so close?
"He broke Ben's whole nose!" and when this ends, go home.

Overall, very good work. I haven't seen much of you before (due to my inactivity in this section) so I'll definitely be checking out more of your stuff.

[Eedee]

Thanks for the feed, man. I appreciate it.

[J.R.]

Enjoyable, nice piece.

Lmao, Young money. Disagree, Liked it a lot.

[Eedee]

I can honestly see where Sam is coming from with that statement. When you have an intro that's so dope, you absolutely have to go for the kill, otherwise even good bars will be portrayed as average. Overall, I liked it though.

And when you smoke those too and drink that hobo's booze,
You'll turn into a dancer wearing go-go boots.
You slow poke fool, juice and yo-yo's, pools,"
And a period of nothing after 'no, coke's cool!'

I wasn't really feeling that set of four, it felt so out of place. Very nice second verse, I must say. All of the tape tracks have been pretty solid so far

I thought those 4 bars were my favorite/most important in the whole track tbh haha. They portrayed someone who's been drinking/doing drugs and what's so "cool" about it and shit and how fucked up you can get - then I come in with "yeah and then you'll black out after you think doing cocaine is cool". But to each his own... Thanks for the feed.

[Sam.]

Those four bars are the ones that I was calling out as #Young Money.

[Eedee]

Those four bars are the ones that I was calling out as #Young Money.

Perhaps... but with a non-Young-Money interpretation of drugs.

[Sam.]

Sam and hesky :2 and name :1. You lose, lol.

[Eedee]

Sam and hesky :2 and name :1. You lose, lol.

*Vader voice* NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

[Sam.]

Whatever floats your boat.