Eedee - [7] Too Far Gone

[Eedee]

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=146623&p=1942758#p1942758

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xEFduA4g ... el&list=UL

[Chorus] (:11)

[Verse 1] (:34)
I'm sorry babe, it's time I gotta let you go,
It's best you don't fight it, it hurts but it's set in stone.
You're wondering why I left a note, it's so you wouldn't waste your time,
Sittin' by the telephone waiting for me to say goodbye.
It's time I had to face the lie, our falling out was too great,
The stakes were high thinking of you, the wife that you'd make.
You know I loved you so, but we left it up in smoke,
You left me twice broken-hearted, I cried, I hope you fucking know
Just how much pain you caused me, it hurt the breathe,
The clouds would rain with strain of prison but now I'm bursting free.
The fuckin' cursed me, look at my wasted youth,
Waiting on somebody who only played me now I'm tasting truth.
You're always in my heart, I hope you feel it too,
I used to envision you being the girl I'd end up kneeling to.
Now that ring is smoke, our special thing is broke,
And now you're so far gone I need someone to sing for hope.

[Chorus] (1:20)

[Verse 2] (1:43)
Now we talk a lot always texting back and forth,
We've even snuck out together, oh god, these savage thoughts
Keep invading my mind, and baby, hold me tight,
I'm cold with fright and I do NOT want you to go tonight.
I want you to stay with me, gazing in your eyes,
Intertwined in intense passion the days turn into nights.
Hey, it'll be alright, even though my words are false,
I'll fake that loving smile when I tell you I'm not hurt at all.
Because the truth is, girl, you're fucking ruthless,
You know exactly how to break a guy's heart there's nothing to it.
But something's brewing, 'bout to unleash the rage,
All these years in your prison, this fucking beast was caged.
I hope you meet the grave knowing that you broke my heart,
You'll be burning in Hell rather than strumming on that golden harp.
I hope you rot you fricking bitch, thinking you can do no wrong,
Hear that clock? It's ticking it's distance grows, you're so gone.

[Chorus] (2:29)

[Verse 3] (2:52)
Now we've got that covered, let me tell you this,
Still remember the first time I ever felt your kiss.
It gave me strength to smile, and that shit takes a while
My hearts a few inches wide but damn that thing raced a mile.
Your blonde wavy hair, it's on baby, yeah,
You are my everything, and you ain't gone anywhere.
If it's wrong, take me there, what's inside your mind,
We thinking the same thing? Let's not fight tonight.
Because you're quite divine, you're like an angel, babe,
I'm sorry to say you held me down like an ankle brace.
With that ball attached, you only weighed me down,
You gave me thoughts like maybe God'll take me now.
We've had our ups and downs, we've went to fucking town,
Even though it sounds wack, gave me a bunch of frowns.
Just know I'm tearing up, and that my throat's tight,
Being with you was so wrong that leaving is so right.

[Chorus] (3:39)

[Sam.]

3 fucking verse of sheer story telling. Plus, a poetic feel to it! WTF, dude? I mean, when it comes to writing about girls, the poet inside of us, just come outta nowhere. This is so nice, why don't you write the rest of your shit with this approach. Damn!

[Eedee]

3 fucking verse of sheer story telling. Plus, a poetic feel to it! WTF, dude? I mean, when it comes to writing about girls, the poet inside of us, just come outta nowhere. This is so nice, why don't you write the rest of your shit with this approach. Damn!

Thanks dawg. Glad you're digging it.

And the only reason I don't write about girls with every drop (god knows I'd be able to... still in this fucked up situation with her) is because it would bore readers and make me look one-dimensional. Versatility, man. Versatility. Gotta switch up the topics, ya know?

[Sam.]

Word. One should never be monotonous.

[Eedee]

Exactly. Hell, Eminem only has a few songs for his daughters and people are asking for his head haha.

[Sam.]

Well, a single theme can be presented in various ways, with various twists and turns, stretching a few fact here and there. Nahimean?

[Eedee]

Well, a single theme can be presented in various ways, with various twists and turns, stretching a few fact here and there. Nahimean?

I nahyamean.

97B&C is different than Going Through Changes, that's for sure. Haile's Song is different than those, as well. So I definitely nahyamean. Which astounds me because they're all fucking awesome songs and that barely scratches the surface in terms of Em's list of songs/topics and people are mad he made a few for his fucking DAUGHTERS. Emphasis on DAUGHTERS. They're a big part of his life.

[Sam.]

Lol @ "nahyamean".

That's why I always say in my feeds; if you saying the same oldthing, say it in a more dramatic manner, add new dimensions too it, change the point of view.

[Eedee]

Shameless bump... one feed isn't good enough!

[Sam.]

It's so whack, one feed is enough.

Inb4datmeme.

[mdemaz]

Sam said it all, you gotta do more emotional stuff like this, tell people about your struggles, it'll make you feel better.

Well anyway, as far as lyrics and conceptual consistency go, you did ok, some minor flaws, I think you know what they are by now.

Just do your thing, and if people dig it, go for it.

[Eedee]

Just an update, I'm going to record this track for my new mixtape. Hopefully it'll be awesome.