I Need A Doctor 2 (Eminem Featuring Dr. Dre & Skyler Grey)

[Atone]

I got bored, began listening to Eminem, and thought of lyrics for a slim shady style I Need A Doctor, where it would start with Eminem with his Slim Shady persona, get interupted by Dr. Dre, and then Eminem taking the 3rd verse, referencing his drug habit and other issues.

The Chorus of course would be from the original


(Chorus) Skyler Grey)

(Verse)(Slim Shady)
I've gone outta my skull, flipped out insane
goin off the wall, slipped out my brain
Mama slapped me so hard my head spun around
i just laughed it off, picked my teeth off the ground
walked away to the tool shead, grabbed a hatchet
gasoline and some matches, about to go ratchet
imagin if i just ran around swingin at faggots
screamin and laughin, no reason just spazzstic-
just mad that i'm 23 and don;t know where my dad went
fuck it, maybe he just never even heard of me
or maybe i'm just unwanted- that could be the reason for my murder spree
who's the first to be- drugged up and gagged
you get tortured for fun, cut up and bagged
STOP SCREAMIN FOR HELP BITCH SHUT UP I'M MAD
this is for all those beatings from dad that i never had
for all the pills i took, shook my head and imagined playing at the park
i never had somebody to play catch or save me from the dark
so why should i be normal, why is it wrong for me to be weird?
MAYBE I SHOULD DRESS LIKE BRITNEY SPEARS AND GROW A BEARD (Oh dear)
wait a minute, the doc is here

(Verse) (Dr. Dre)
Now slim listen a minute, your slippin
get a grip and pay attention
see you aint so different
from the world there is other's just like you in existance
who could snap in an instant,
my father wasn't around either and i turned out fine
found rap and stayed on the grind
grew up and got paid to just rhyme
just sayin a few things i got on my mind
and slim you crazy, you just a fool
i could see you as the type to shoot up a school
and you need to chill, for real, just relax and find your zone
i heard you rhyme, you could turn that into somethin for the microphone
leave the drugs alone, before you turn to an addict and ya mind get blown
you young with a future unknown, no reason to lose it
over somethin stupid, slim don't do it
this life is ruthless, just open that bottle and turn it to music

(Verse)(Eminem)
Well Doc i guess your right, i should bless the mic
it's best to write instead of fight
and these pill's leave me a mess at night
i can't sleep, i just lay awake and space out
always eatin donuts and plates of take out
why should i be mad i never had a father
i should be blessed that i had a daughter
i otta- call up my girl and tell er i love er
maybe even take time to call up my mother
and help build up a career for my brother
cuz you only live once, might as well make it golden
and make every memory worth holden
i'm tired of runnin from demons
lookin in the mirror screamin
it's time i fight for a reason
a meanin to keep breathin
this music is what helped me thru shit
whenever i was on edge about to lose it
so let me get ahold of myself a moment
get a grip on my reality and own it

(Chorus) (Skyler Grey)

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[Eedee]

Definitely an interesting concept, I just don't think you pulled it off. The Slim Shady verse didn't have enough rhyming to be a Slim Shady verse. The Dre verse was ehhh. The last verse had better rhyming, especially on the first few bars, where was that in the first verse??

Plus this didn't flow to the INAD beat, which I see you didn't post, for obvious reasons haha

Yeah, interesting concept but I don't think you pulled it off tbh.

[dmnelson0351]

I liked it, but it wasn't a complicated rhyme scheme that slim shady has. I could see Dre doing the second verse, but the last verse, Eminem would put more into it. Don't get me wrong, it was good, but not Eminem good.

[Atone]

lol i know it wasn't up to Par with Eminem skill, i was sort of in a mode to write verses that i could picture Dre doing, idk y either lol

[Mr.DGAF]

I read this earlier, just forgot to give feed. Like the others have said, its a fantastic idea. Just, the execution lacks. Prime Slim Shady is impossible to mimick in terms of sheer rhyming ability. But you did a good job on Dre's part. And the flow is good by itself, just not to the beat haha. I like the idea though, I'd like to see more abstract ideas like this coupled with the rhyming of some of your last pieces.

[K Reidy]

Major flaw I had with it (correct me if I'm wrong) is that they have a random number of bars... Verse One 20 verse Two 16 verse Three 20

Not having it 16-16-16 could disrupt the flow! Just sayin!

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Yeah man I mainly agree with everyone else, the rhyming was good but not spectacular, my advice is when you come up with a Dope Ass idea like this, take your time on it, Write it then come back and look at it and edit shit out you know? anyways, good job man your improving for sure

[Nimation]

I think the last verse killed it. Nice job