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Spirit of Hip-Hop (TR Shady Tape Bonus Track, LT Reunion)

Postby J.R. » Aug 28th, '12, 20:37

Will Add Geno's if ever fucking finishes.
beat~ http://www.shadowville.com/122327/genre ... in-smoke-2
LOF ~ viewtopic.php?f=24&t=147186

Not my best verse, eh.


[Name]
Hiroshima verses and, Nagasaki wordplay
grab a saki, stur cray, rapping in the nerd way
Controlling all the milky way, you can call it breakfast
as we eatin' rappers mercilessly, lucky charms and turkey hill
You're good, I'm just preferring great, useless dudes disturbing me
Chickens rapping stupidly, or maybe cause I'm stupid great
Either way I don't feel it, and I'm over wait like losing weight
Conversate with shoes of Wade, killing *****, FLA
Allow me to introduce your fate, me, Moley and Junior Rank
Will rap your ass with uno name, Trinity is who you hate
Going in, without breaking ice, like I'm figure skating
Minds we are penetrating, lines we get 10's on ratings
Regulatin', war I am instigating, without hesitating
Taking over Germany, Ireland and Denmark
Then I destroy Japan with my first bar


J.R.
Busier than a one legged man in an ass kickin contest
Im the prodical son, this game is my conquest.
"C'mon lets, show em that hip hop's alive,
I bet they'll feel the vibe, we'll rhyme,
And teach these faggots how to thrive."
Dive, straight into the hive.
Exploring my thoughts, searching my mind.
I'm the cream of the crop, leading the tribe.
They are feedin my drive, ensuring I can comply,
So now I'm taking this dive, I'm puttin in time.
Kickin the horse', beatin it's side.
And through my spirit rap will survive.
Fight any modern day jive
of people saying rap isn't alive
Unlike our music, you fuckers can go die,
My spirit, our rap is living through it, its alive.


Geno
Picture me dim-witted, wishin' my wick's lit up,
Instead of a big head, my dick is an inch lesser,
They said I'm a prick, never will end up with shit, guess I'm,
A menance sentenced to pennin' letters to this rhythm,
Nah! I'm against critics... They're hung, I'm lynchin' 'em,
Brothers wanna cut me down... But I emit venom,
That I will dispense on the record to now level the balance,
Second guessin' my talent will never end with a chalice,
Being banged against another one, it's settled with malice,
I embody the power of sound, it's presence is magic,
I went and I captured it when you said that I couldn't,
I bled through my gashes, and now I've left you my footprints,
From underrated to overrated I found it a curse,
Stuck in places I know are hated, now back down to the Earth,
I was astounded at first, that's how this genre's gettin' filthy,
But I take it in stride, the spirit of hip-hop is livin' in me.
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Re: Spirit of Hip-Hop (TR Shady Tape Bonus Track, LT Reunion

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Aug 29th, '12, 18:16

name- I like the verse cuz of it was just all over the place haha made it very entertaining to read. You've got one hell of a vocabulary lol I was never bored with it, even though I didn't know what you were talking about most of the time. Some of the time I really liked your use of multis--other times they seemed forced. My fav. lines:

Chickens rapping stupidly, or maybe cause I'm stupid great
Either way I don't feel it, and I'm over wait like losing weight
Conversate with shoes of Wade, killing *****, FLA
Allow me to introduce your fate, me, Moley and Junior Rank

J.R.- This verse was pretty clear cut. It was focused, but seemed kind of stale. Very mundane. I haven't seen your other verses, but I get the feeling you maybe weren't trying too hard on this one. It still gets the job done though. Also, you have some pretty strange punchlines/metaphors:

Busier than a one legged man in an ass kickin contest

??? Work on those.

Anyway, weird lines and all, I liked these bars the most:

I'm the cream of the crop, leading the tribe.
They are feedin my drive, ensuring I can comply,
So now I'm taking this dive, I'm puttin in time.
Kickin the horse', beatin it's side.
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Re: Spirit of Hip-Hop (TR Shady Tape Bonus Track, LT Reunion

Postby SG. » Aug 29th, '12, 20:36

name > JR.

Name, your verse was extremely clever. That last line actually made say "oh shit, son!" However, I feel like the whole big long-worded references are a bit played out. And Ireland's my territory.

JR, meh. As you said, it wasn't one of your best verses. It seemed very simple to me.
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Postby Eedee » Aug 29th, '12, 20:48

Name - your last bar was clever as hell. That was sick. However, the structure of your verse threw me off. Looks like a pyramid on it's side... You had good rhymes and had the second best verse.

JR - yeah... not your best work. It felt forced as hell and I cringed reading it. It just wasn't good... I've seen better from you. Loads better.

Geno - fuckin' dope. Not much to say other than that lol. You know you did well. :y: But here's what I liked about your verse:

Picture me dim-witted, wishin' my wick's lit up,
Instead of a big head, my dick is an inch lesser,
They said I'm a prick, never will end up with shit, guess I'm,
A menance sentenced to pennin' letters to this rhythm,


Dat inverse.

From underrated to overrated I found it a curse,
Stuck in places I know are hated, now back down to the Earth,


This flows like a motherfucking beast.
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Re: Spirit of Hip-Hop (TR Shady Tape Bonus Track, LT Reunion

Postby J.R. » Aug 29th, '12, 20:54

To the new guy,

Busier than a one legged man in an ass kickin contest

Is actually a decent "line" if you will. He would be busy, because he would be using his only leg to kick ass..no..? okay..

yeah, I did this verse to get it out. More or less. So stop beating a dead horse :shifty:
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Postby Eedee » Aug 29th, '12, 21:02

J.R. wrote: So stop beating a dead horse :shifty:


But she deserves it.
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Re: Spirit of Hip-Hop (TR Shady Tape Bonus Track, LT Reunion

Postby J.R. » Aug 29th, '12, 21:05

Eedee wrote:
J.R. wrote: So stop beating a dead horse :shifty:


But she deserves it.

Where'd you get that picture of Menzo at doe
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Postby Eedee » Aug 29th, '12, 21:09

Please...
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Re: Spirit of Hip-Hop (TR Shady Tape Bonus Track, LT Reunion

Postby Blu » Aug 31st, '12, 23:06

Ehh... the only verse I really dug was name's. It flowed nicely for me. :happy:

Geno, I don't understand this line: "Second guessin' my talent will never end with a chalice,"

Isn't a chalice a cup?

So how will your talent never end with a chalice? :-k
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