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1698 (Flashing Shots) [2418 EP, Track 3]

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1698 (Flashing Shots) [2418 EP, Track 3]

Postby J.R. » Sep 11th, '12, 20:57

Figured I'd try something new.

*Reference ~ http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FDdQsVKfEOI
(For the reference, skip to :35) [I'd recommend watching this to enjoy the song a bit more. The beat is in GTA IV, btw]

**
You work for Gay Tony in GTA IV BOGT, so yeah. There you go.


Beat ~
(http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IawR7tfi_bI)

LOF ~ viewtopic.php?f=24&t=148317

[Intro]
"Psst. Hey. I'm a gun club member."
Fuck.

[Verse 1]
I walk from my house down the sidewalk to the bank,
Chalk up another hater, starin cuz I'm covered in chains.
Bang, I here a gunshot, but fuck it I brought my glock,
See cops driving past, hittin the gas they aint gonna stop,
Walk into the money depot and say hello to the teller,
She don't know it but later this bitch goin down like old yeller
Then I see her get mellowdramatic, she gets all fuckin static,
shakin fast like I already had it, shakin ass like I already grabbed it,
She tries to mask it, but I ask her what's wrong and she just points,
See three dudes with joints, guns and toys, "get down or we shootin boys,"
I see the lights go off, time flies and suddenly night just falls.
Speakin of that right then Gay tony calls, asks if I've seen his toy balls**
"Hey halt!" One of the dudes scream, and my phones then crushed,
"Goddamnit," Listen I hate to be mean but do that again I fuck you up,
Shucks.. then I look to my left and what do I see? Dude shakin next to me,
He whispers, "Hey I've got a gun.. and luck.. I'm a gun club member see?"
Whips out an ID. I tell him its a bad Idea, he'll get shot and die,
He looks at me and says "I gotta try"..Jumps up, gets shot, left to cry.
For the next few seconds I watched that fucker die.. then police popped in,
saw the robbers, one of the men shot em (blem!). Arrested me for being "Not one of them"
from there on, if you can call him that, I'll always remember my fucked up friend,
jumped up to risk his life and basically got jawed in the motherfuckin end.
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Re: 1698 (Flashing Shots)

Postby Eedee » Sep 12th, '12, 07:24

Hmmm, the rhymes weren't that great BUT, the way it was worded kept me flowing to the beat and wanting to read more.

I don't get that a lot and this one got me. :y:
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Re: 1698 (Flashing Shots)

Postby J.R. » Sep 12th, '12, 14:12

Thanks. Anything Gta/Ye inspired hopefully does that. Maybe we can work together soon man? But yeah, thanks :)
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Re: 1698 (Flashing Shots)

Postby Eedee » Sep 12th, '12, 19:42

Yeah I'd be down for a collab.
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