[2] I Wanna Be [CC]

[J.R.]

Atone feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=148863
J.R. Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=148894
(We would've written to a beat, but there wasn't one we liked for it or that was really long enough)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ReIaauFVMA8

[Intro- Eminem Sample]
I wanna be the best who ever did it
Don't know if that goal is feasible, or it isn't
But if it is thank God, if you're listenin'
Please give me the strength to crush all competition
You can't blame me for dreaming, I'm a dreamer
And if I'm coming off brash please forgive me
But, that's all I want


[Verse~ J.R.]
Yeah em, you tell em and I'll sell em with my voice,
lets make some noise boys, kill this ish like royce!
Word-play? I play words all day in my mind,
but hey its my choice if they go in my rhymes,
time, to squeeze out the light from this lime,
get it? let me say it slow like that tard from the text commerical,
this is my shine, my day, i'll kill you, pull a "steve urkel",
"did I do that" yeah, lyrical rap and storytelling can't be had,
crap you either have rhymes or spiritual flow and yo I'm mad,
because it hard to be the best with so much weight on my chest,
so I put a gun straight at my head and hope I'm blessed.
and in rest, I find myself still consumed by the beast,
Sold my soul to the devil, now I'm stuck upon his leash.
He has our souls in the kettle stirrin, look at the havoc he wreaks,
Then he hands us our abilities to rap, our craft and says "feast" .

[Chorus]
I wanna be the best whoever did it,
even if it means giving it all to the non-living,
so please dear satan if you're listening,
please grant me the strength to crush all competition.


[Verse ~ Atone]
on the mic i'm crazy insane rippin on tracks
when i write i'm blazing the game just spittin these raps
amazing with the flames i ignite and hit em with that
sickness i kick so listen i'm rippin this shit
no beef i'm flippin the script, i'm a lyrical freak show
a spirit to heat flow's i put dinomite in the verse
i'm atomic comin strong with bomb's to burst
you little girl's got to many flowers on yo skirts
you could never match me, no matter how many hours that you work
your just cowards with a purse, faces powderd and what's worse
is that you doubt it and you thirst for a game that's crowded with your dirt
you shout it in a verse, about you dummy's gettin honey's
flashin money, you bastards funny, cuz you aint done shit
but you claim it, and it's the same with the gangs you run with
i don't wanna be another trend, i wanna make somethin new begin
i don't wanna be like them, i wanna take you all on a spin
i don't wanna be another mother fucker that everybody tends to see
fuck followin i'm leadin the way cuz i wanna be me

(Chorus)

(Verse)(Bold = J.R.)(Underlined = Atone)
I Jump in the lane and rip on punks in the game-
crush em- insane, dribble their brains
Jordan took the ball had some fun with it
i had to take it all and run with it
You haters thought I was done with this?
My blunders are truly wondrous,
they help me grow and become thunderous,
Prosperous, I'm on top of this metropolis, ain't no stoppin us,
NO TOPPIN US, we droppin hottness plus we rock the bus
shake it up like a quake and bust to make ya fuss
don't matter if you love it or hatin us
if you talkin about it than we must be makin buzz
buzz like a bee, we flow like the sea and drop like bombs,
Plus you'll see, that CC, is a battle you can't win, Vietnam,
And we were gone but now were back, this isn't an attack,
It's a facking slaughter and your caught in the trap, snap-
Goes your neck. Check to see if Atone is holding up as we bomb the place,
Heck of course he is, as I'm leavin he fuckin noms your mommas face-
He's a monster from outta space- he destroys you and beams off without a trace,
And his ship is so fast bitch, ain't no sense in giving chase.

[Eedee]

JR - It was hard to pick up your flow without a beat. Did you mean to rhyme "commercial" with "urkel" like Em did on HCTW? Anyway, I wasn't feeling this verse much. Not very many multis in this one (I thought you were working on that?). You had content and a message but I felt you could've rhymed more, ya know?

Atone - Your verse was actually pretty good. The first few bars came out hot with flow and rhyme. You definitely had the better verse on this.

Third verse was a cool back and forth. Nothing much to critique on that.

And that's not an excuse for not writing to a beat. You had a standard three - 16 bar verses and choruses. All standard beats have intros and shit too. That's honestly no excuse NOT to write to a beat.

[J.R.]

Thanks Eedee. I slacked off on my multis on this, and this piece (at least the first verse, mine) was written before I ever made that comment. But thats still my fault and I'm still working with my newer pieces, and incorporating more beats.

The main reason we didn't use a beat is because we just didn't find one we liked. If any beat applies, its the Our house beat. Actually, it does apply. I wrote my verse to it, and the rest of it flows. I know the chorus, Atone's verse, etc is to it. So updated the OP.