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Eedee ft. Geno - "Look Both Ways"

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Eedee ft. Geno - "Look Both Ways"

Postby Eedee » Sep 29th, '12, 02:42

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Beat

*Response to Atone's diss.

Eedee;Geno

[Verse 1] (:20)
The only way I kiss you is the kiss of death, this bitch is next
I'll rip his head and slit his neck, murdered by this simple text.
You gonna cut my ethernet? Oh no, this fag'll never guess
How I'll make him eat every syllable that he's ever said.
Belittle ya, carve out your middle from your skeleton,
Take your shine? I'm on FIRE so you'll have to drink the Devil's cum.
Faggot, think, before you act on this, oh wait, holy shit
You dissed me AND Geno, you "cot" the wrath, you'll be folding quick.
Just stay home and call us gay? Is that a double rainbow?
Cuz you'd HAVE to be on drugs to think you're not in trouble, A-tone.
This was almost a triple slam-down, D-GAF or Menzo to come
We're the frontline, tough guy, to that damn end zone you'd run.
So you target me? That's funny, okay go maybe try?
But where's the dot? Oh yeah... you got a lazy "i".
You think you're good at multis? I take it you're Shady?
You're just a first round loser, I'll call you Tracy McGrady.

This kid is writing faggot rap, I think he's gone soft guys,
Wants our dicks in his face, oh that explains the cock-eye,
Now he's gone blind, half retarded at the wrong time,
"Nah, it's all fine! I'm really lovin' all your hard rhymes!"
...God, why'm I in the middle of this benign fued?
Atone ain't even fuckin' lookin' at me, I'M BESIDE YOU!
I feel like I'm beefin' with a senior needin' time to...
...Formulate their thoughts, it's like highschool!
Remember how the children would make fun of you for lookin' high?
Then when you got into rap you came to terms with crooked eyes,
You look surprised, starin' in the wrong direction but whatever,
Never got why you could never hop on beats and hope to catch 'em,
But now I think I get it... This kid is deaf and still regrets it,
He was havin' sex with seven men and two still needed entrance,
So he said, "hey fellas, it's alright" and offered up his ears,
So we are today, and now you have this fuckin' queer.
Last edited by Eedee on Oct 1st, '12, 00:23, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: Eedee ft. Geno - "Look Both Ways"

Postby J.R. » Sep 29th, '12, 04:47

Geno needs a Lof too :y:

Pretty nice drop. There weren't a ton of personals, which are my favorite besides his eye, which is kinda eh. Still funny you brought it up. Hoppin on beats too.

Eedee you just completely flipped his verse, and that's cool. You made it work and took everything he said and dissed him, but be sure to mix in a nice mix of personals, new, fresh attacks (you've used beats before, you've said your better than him before.)

Pretty nice drop guys. :y:
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Re: Eedee ft. Geno - "Look Both Ways"

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 30th, '12, 06:19

The beat I don't personally like, but that's fine as long as you guys flowed nicely to it, which it seems you did.


I read Atone's and so I caught some of the references in Eedee's verse, I really like how you did that flip. Lyrically it was fresh as always, good flow, good rhymes. I like the idea behind the Tracy McGrady line, could have been executed better but that's not what it's about here, I like it. Some creative lines in there as well. :y:


Geno this was a solid verse for what it was, you already know what I think of your writing. Always dropping hot verses. I feel you started off a bit slow but gradually picked up. I feel this time you kind of shifted away from focusing entirely on multi's and just kind of spoke your mind more, but that's just what I get from reading it...I might be wrong. And that's actually a good thing in MC'ing, being able to express yourself instead of just straight rhyming everything. (BTW I'm not saying you didn't rhyme well in this verse, you did...just saying what I personally got from it was there was a little more focus aimed at the other little things. :y:)


I feel like the lazy eye shot became a bit redundant in the overall drop, but that aside...some good lines and the writing is advanced, from both of you. Good shit fellas. :b:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Eedee ft. Geno - "Look Both Ways"

Postby Recene » Sep 30th, '12, 21:45

I have no idea from where did the Atone's diss come. But anyways, however it sounded like, you must've murdered him lyrical-wise.
"The only way I kiss you is the kiss of death, this bitch is next
I'll rip his head and his slit is neck, murdered by this simple text."
Kind of my favorite line from this diss. The beat isn't my type but I liked it anyways. Great shit here.
"Murder you on the track like Tony Stewart!"
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