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No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

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No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

Postby Eedee » Oct 3rd, '12, 08:27

LoF

[Original verse] - Inspectah Deck
I smoke on the mic like smokin' Joe Frazier
The hell-raiser, raising hell with the flavor
Terrorize the jam like troops in Pakistan
Swinging through your town like your neighborhood Spiderman
So uhh, tick tock keep ticking
While I get you flipping off the shit I'm kicking
The Lone Ranger, code red: danger!
Deep in the dark with the art to rip the charts apart
The vandal, too hot to handle
You battle, you're saying goodbye like Tevin Campbell
Roughneck, Inspectah Deck's on the set
The rebel, I make more noise than heavy metal



[Emulation Day 1] - Eedee
Holding too tight to see that there's no danger,
The spell made her, making spells in the nature
This witch has a plan to uncoup this savage man
Kicking up the ground, so much dust when I'm in town
Oh fuck it, cock meet business.
Time to end you - it'll stop the frickin' rippin'
The goal's safer, most said: "hey there"
I keep in my heart, I start spittin' the bombs a lot
You can't hold a candle
To the shit I spit, it's a cinch, shit you never handled
Done yet? Eedee's here to cop your Deck
Chop your neck, conquer death, he said he's better.
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Re: No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

Postby Slim Fiasco » Oct 3rd, '12, 08:39

As I said, great lookin' out, I think this verse is a good one to start this thing off. I liked how you placed the same rhyming words at some lines, like how you have candle whereas in the original it's handle. Me, I kinda went with completely different words.
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Re: No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

Postby Eedee » Oct 3rd, '12, 19:59

I tried rhyming the whole verse word for word, especially near the beginning since that's what emulation is lol

Thanks for looking.
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Re: No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

Postby Mr.DGAF » Oct 3rd, '12, 22:24

Niiice. I liked this man. Good job of keeping the scheme up, kinda the same idea I had. I can't wait to post the verse I wanna emulate. The schemes are so crazy.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

Postby CrashBand » Oct 4th, '12, 00:46

Awww. So this is how you were meant to do it.

Well one way to do it i suppose :shifty:

This was impressive :y:

Although there were like two words that didn't rhyme with the original.
I'm not tryin to be rude, but I sincerely wanna fuck the taste out of your mouth
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Re: No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

Postby Eedee » Oct 4th, '12, 00:47

CrashBand wrote:Awww. So this is how you were meant to do it.

Well one way to do it i suppose :shifty:

This was impressive :y:

Although there were like two words that didn't rhyme with the original.


FUCK YOU ASSHOLE! YEAH, BITE ME.

Nah, thanks for the feed. :confusion:
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Re: No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

Postby CrashBand » Oct 4th, '12, 00:51

That last sentence was a joke.
I'm not tryin to be rude, but I sincerely wanna fuck the taste out of your mouth
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Re: No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

Postby Eedee » Oct 4th, '12, 00:59

CrashBand wrote:That last sentence was a joke.


I know, I got it haha. I was trying to be funny with the "Kim" reference.
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Re: No Danger [Emulation Day 1]

Postby CrashBand » Oct 4th, '12, 01:28

Yeah I got that haha. My bad.
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