Year Anniversary..Just 16.

[PAINKILLƎR]

smh, I can't even write that good. I'm doomed.

well*

And yes, you're doomed.

How dare you correct my grammar.

[Eedee]

smh, I can't even write that good. I'm doomed.

well*

And yes, you're doomed.

How dare you correct my grammar.

Oh shit, I'm sorry.

[Sam.]

I'll just feed the OP's verse.

I don't know what others are so hyped about, but, sorry to say, I'm not happy the way this shaped up. The rhymes were good and many in number but very inconsistent in placement. You used internal rhymes way too much than necessary, that actually sways away the time spent spitting the syllables in that bar. There's a domino effect originating from this. The flow was no were near to perfection' infact there was none at times.

I'm not saying that this is a shitty verse, but it's more like a raw diamond that has sharp edges that needs to taken care of to make it worth selling. I mean polish your shit. You know the basic concept, practice more.

[Sam.]

Lol Sam you sound like you've read the dictionary trying to sound smart or something.

Her verse has a good flow, it's just difficult to interpret through text. We wrote it to a beat.

To be smart in front of you? Who would I try to do that, what a waste of time that would be.

If only she had posted that beat, my feed would have followed suit. Did she? She didn't. So I'm gonna feed what I see. If she's has a problem with that, let her speak, Swifty.

[ChristinaE12]

Lol its all good. Thanks for replying. And I forgot to post the beat too oh well. This is from over a year ago..so.

[Sam.]

Lol its all good. Thanks for replying. And I forgot to post the beat too oh well. This is from over a year ago..so.

I'm curious to see your progress. Got any new shit?