bigray - control (tr response)

[PAINKILLƎR]

Got dissed twice. Murder murder my mind state now.

[Notalius]

5/10 .. you just wanted to rhyme for the sake of it .. meh

[Guess_Who]

haha, I love these things. Good job Bigray.

[SajN]

Remind me to feed this tomorrow lol

[Snakebeast]

"I Spit ridiculous I got a gimmick list, Im a infamous lyricist
I deliver with emphasis and spit syphilis, why you all so sensitive?
Rolly you’re a dick with impotence, imma’ prick with benefits
I’m also insensitive, Ill kidnap you and make your family remember this"

I love these first lines, but dude, not doing much to get rid of the "biggay" nickname, are ya

The rhyming here is much better than I usually see from you but try not to Crooked I it too much ie. putting random complicated words that rhyme just because you can.

Overall, awesome :3

[RainMan44]

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=162824
BEAT: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g8eCPu29vEc

Verse 1

I Spit ridiculous I got a gimmick list, Im a infamous lyricist
I deliver with emphasis and spit syphilis, why you all so sensitive?
Rolly you’re a dick with impotence, imma’ prick with benefits
I’m also insensitive, Ill kidnap you and make your family remember this
My last hit was at Slik and was a diss at high percentages
I’m big, relevant and now again at this, call this the genesis
Trimss, I’m pickin’ him and I’ll stick Pain's dick in him and enter like insulin
And if you sit with him you’ll get what I’m givin’ him
Eedee you already a victim and don't wanna’ get hit again
Notalius, put your hands up in the air, then start surrenderin’
Lance you feel my adrenaline? I’ll kick you twice in the chin
And get rid of all the middlemen like Mononym
I’m competitive and infinite, Hage to you imma’ stimulant
He’s a little bitch runnin’ and needs to be disciplined
I’m tentative but I play with tr like a mandolin, I’m biased
Ego n CP called me a caveman but won’t get it cuz they Canadian

Verse 2

Ray’s in destruction mode and the goal does exist
I brought more names to drop in this list
Basedshady’s got a big lip and won’t shut up
Please put somethin’ in his mouth cuz my zippers stuck
Amadeo and Insider are too ugly for a photo
They’re two bitches, they like Dorthy and Toto
Silver, I know you were lookin’ for some courage
When Geno murked you, you should'a had Geico Insurance
I’m hood, I’ll crash SajN’s benz up in my Hyundai, again
Silver, you can’t even buy a pizza on a whole months pay
I just smoked some purp, I'm hungry
I'm about to eat Pain, Ray’s got the munchies
PK If you give me a fair one this Monday
I'll smack you, Pain, Lil B into next week and fuck you up on Sunday
I creep at night, me against all of youz’ a fair fight
I mean in real life I’ll stab you all with my knife

Edit: I had to change 1 line I forgot something lol

I'm feeling this bro, especially the first verse. I like the whole concept of it too, and the first verse especially you killed, not just rhyming wise but also with incorporating all the words with alike sounds - just gives it that little extra kick. I like it. However I feel like you kinda got a little lazy as the 2nd verse went on but the second verse seems more content/humor/punchliney rap orientated.

So overall this is dope piece. Cant hate. Good one bro

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