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Hesky - Losing CONTROL

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Re: Hesky - Losing CONTROL

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Aug 16th, '13, 00:50

Lmao fucking dead at the cover art haha awesome man.

This was dope, I was expecting some silly rap like we did but damn man you went in. The rhyming was great, flowed just as great throughout. Some serious shit, really like the direction you took it.

I gain strength from their weakness, and it's rightfully mine
Ever since my return in January I've been giving sight to the blind


That was my favourite line, lots of great lines man.

Great drop.
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Re: Hesky - Losing CONTROL

Postby Mr.DGAF » Aug 16th, '13, 01:50

The most poetic of these drops hahaha. I love the cover art. Had me dying.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Hesky - Losing CONTROL

Postby Eedee » Aug 16th, '13, 06:44

Lol I like what DGAF said. The most poetic of the drops. Also had some great rhymes and shit.
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Re: Hesky - Losing CONTROL

Postby RainMan44 » Aug 17th, '13, 11:09

damn. this shit is mad dope. the punches and the rhyme schemes r nice as fuck. the flow comes off kinda strange in my head, but im sure u got it on lock b. nice ppiece, good drop :y: :b:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Hesky - Losing CONTROL

Postby Halftongue Dre » Aug 19th, '13, 01:19

The talent is there. But it was all pretty much influenced by falsehood and worthless themes. The line about being thanked later was cool though. But you should watch what you type about giving sight to the blind. God will convict you into cutting off your own fingers talking like that man..
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Re: Hesky - Losing CONTROL

Postby Eedee » Aug 19th, '13, 01:46

De'anumb Halftongue wrote:The talent is there. But it was all pretty much influenced by falsehood and worthless themes. The line about being thanked later was cool though. But you should watch what you type about giving sight to the blind. God will convict you into cutting off your own fingers talking like that man..


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