Nobody's Watching

[Eedee]

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=162789#p2274632

This doesn't have to do with the recent diss tracks. This is just a personal piece.

[Verse 1]
Take this with a grain of salt
But maybe talking on these tracks ain't the best way to vault
Over my problems and pretend my life ain't utter shit
My dreams are fucking toast, I got no knife to butter it.
And ever since I uttered it, I don't believe the words I spit
And hopefully this curse or gift can so agree to lift the Earth.
And get me through the hard times, help me carry on
Rap feels like Christmas, and I sing the merry songs
But fuck that, I know I shouldn't feel this way
I feel really fake messing up on fifty takes, a silly face
I make, but fuck it, fifty-one's the magic number,
And it's by pure coincidence I laugh with thunder.
My rap is underrated, no it's not, I suck dick,
Fuck this, come quick! I'm gonna quit and chuck pens
Into the fucking trash can, but then I write another one,
It's a vicious cycle, no end in sight, I'm fuckin' done...

[Hook 1]
Look, I know I'm not the best, so
I'm working on it, so give it a rest, yo.
I just wanna hear "you're so fucking awesome!"
That's what I want... but nobody's watching... (x2)

[Verse 2]
Look, I'm gonna be completely honest,
Good lyrics, deep meaning's what Eedee promised.
But did I deliver? Sure, maybe, maybe not,
But there's no need to call me that akin to lady parts.
So what I stare at stars, that's my other love
I go inside and spit, that's what keeps my mother up.
Especially when I ruined my college life,
But I try to keep my chin to get through it like all the strife
Will just vanish, damn it, the whole planet, I have it,
And I'll control this shit, okay? No matter my stance is
I'll pull through, I'm full too, I've had it up to here,
When I knock heads with the Cosmos, the planet struck a sphere.
And I'm still trying to see if it's cancerous or not,
This feeling in my stomach 'bout my album when it drops.
I worked my fucking ass off, somehow I'll get a load of shit
I went to toe to toe with ghosts so go and hold your lips, bitch.

[Hook 2]
Look, I know I'm not the best, so
I'm working on it, so give it a rest, yo.
I just wanna hear "you're so fucking awesome!"
So I'ma fucking do this like nobody's watching. (x2)

[Ka0t1c]

I'm dreams are fucking toast, I got no knife to butter it.

"my" - this was a great line in the opening, i like the mood and the honesty, pretty good piece, it had some good multies, yet this piece seemed to flow effortless. if anything negative, i would criticize your transition on some lines, they just didn't mesh with the main rhyme scheme, still solid.

[PAINKILLƎR]

For some reason I keep reading this and feel it's a diss

But naw, it was good. I felt your frustrations but tbh I'm tired of hearing you rap complaints, nahmean? Loosen up a bit bruh, I enjoy most of your shit. The piece was good tho, the rhyming was casual but in a good way. I also liked that part Menzo mentioned a lot too. Good drop mane.

[Eedee]

Thanks guys. I appreciate the feed

Pain, I told you I was having a shitty day lol. Sorry for the topic.

I went back and fixed some grammatical errors - thanks Kaotic.

Menzo, October 25.

[Mr.DGAF]

I feel like your writing has been really coming together lately. On the album as well. You're doing a really good job of keeping the train of thought steaming along the verse. For instance, the bars about 50 takes and then 51 being the magic number. It's just nice to see that little thought bubble continue into another bar. This was nice mane. I really dig the hook. As for flow, your writtens always gave me trouble finding exactly how you wanted it to flow but I found this one pretty well. Regardless I know you'd make it flow haha, I have heard your music enough to feel pretty confident about that.

This inspired me to write tbh, good shit.

[Eedee]

Thanks mane. I'm happy with the album itself, which is pretty much the number one thing. But it's just nagging at me about what people will say when they hear it, nahimean? Oh well. Only one way to find out.

[PAINKILLƎR]

Lupe Fiasco