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Re: We In Control - Bigray & Alieus

Postby 12characters » Aug 21st, '13, 20:08

Holy shit. Menzo with that fucking ether.
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Re: We In Control - Bigray & Alieus

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Aug 21st, '13, 20:09

My favourite part was when I wasn't supposed to get dissed but got dissed anyway Image

Ray had some high points in rhyming but some so high ones as well. It went together really well, flowed well. Lots of hilarious lines. Good shit fellas.
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Re: We In Control - Bigray & Alieus

Postby Mr.DGAF » Aug 21st, '13, 20:15

Hahahaha the earbuds line was actually quite fucking funny. I love the schemes you went with Menzo, sounds very pleasing when spitting it. I caught a few inverse's, sure there's more but I'll have to re-read haha. Ray, your verse was actually pretty damn impressive man. Some nice rhymes, you're getting better at structuring your rhymes and improving them.
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How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: We In Control - Bigray & Alieus

Postby Snakebeast » Aug 22nd, '13, 03:28

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I finally got dissed. And so many times :flutter: I love all of you. Of course, you know this means war.

EDIT: Some of the shit I really like:

This guy’s so dumb, you wrote 8 bars about gay jokes
By now we already know that Snake blows
I grabbed a fuckin’ curling iron, shoved it in his ass
Kid jizzed his g spot got hit and I just did the math


:laughing: You didn't deny being gay doe :shifty:

Time to speak on that faggot addressin' me and Slik
Snake, if I ever even glimpsed at his lips
That's implying me going down on this pussy bitch
Oh, and I heard you're Chinese? More rice prease!
I need onry a string of fross to have your eyes sheathed
This adorescent has to get his dad to get him viorent games
And if his average is ress than 98, he doesn't eat...for five days


Stereotypical asian insults but the "r" thing made me laugh so fucking hard :laughing:
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Re: We In Control - Bigray & Alieus

Postby Eedee » Aug 22nd, '13, 03:35

Lol this was fun to read.

Bigray, you've gotten heaps better. Props.

Menzo, great as always. Great rhymes, punches, etc. That last line made me choke on my drink haha. Brilliant set up.
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Re: We In Control - Bigray & Alieus

Postby Francesco » Aug 24th, '13, 11:17

Pretty cool actually... I'm not even surprised. :y:
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Re: We In Control - Bigray & Alieus

Postby Francesco » Aug 25th, '13, 23:48

Menzo wrote:Thanks my man.


bigray wrote:Thanks guys got the feed :y:


Any-fucking-time y'all!
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