Journey On

by **Eedee** » Sep 21st, '13, 12:21

Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=164157#p2332539

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DduLfaT3Xuk

Audio link: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=164200

(00:19)
Time is of the essence, the longer it takes us
This journey that we're on, the stronger it makes us.
Patience is a virtue, we hustle and yawn
Till we're exhausted and drop down, thunder from God
Echoes in our ears, a reminder in song
Comes in the form of drums booming, then lightning applauds.
And it strikes in our hearts, look up - the Sun's looming
Over top of our goals, doubt is our undoing.

(1:00)
Humans tend to sway so hither and thither
Until we open our eyes and see the picture is bigger.
Stupid till the day that we open our minds,
Enterin' information and just hopin' we're right.
Till our lights turn off and our lips don't move,
Fight until you taste blood and spit yo' tooth.
Spill your life into the pavement or create your own,
Fight back if they're racin' to erase your home.

(1:30)
Sometimes the journey that we take is hard,
Sometimes it's needed to erase the scars.
Sometimes the feeling that we came so far
Is overshadowed by the fact who we say we are
Is no different than the versions that we dream to be,
Diverted by diversions so diverse with ease
That every direction has been trod before,
So we're Set in our ways, like a god of war.
But then we lift our eyes and we can see the sky
And that feeling deep inside? It can keep alive
The key to our cell, but we keep dividin',
Till we breathe divine and we can see horizons...

by **Flamez** » Sep 21st, '13, 16:53

I like your writing style man I enjoyed this piece.

The flow and rhyming is good. Look forward to reading more stuff from you.

by **Eedee** » Sep 21st, '13, 17:53

Thanks guys!

I recorded it, check it out if you want: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=164200

by **enjinn** » Sep 21st, '13, 18:23

awesome verse...very well written...im gonna listen to the audio now

by **Eedee** » Sep 21st, '13, 18:26

enjinn wrote:awesome verse...very well written...im gonna listen to the audio now

Cheers.

by **Eedee** » Sep 21st, '13, 19:19

Horsebot3K wrote:The recording sounds like a completely professional song people would buy. Excellent delivery and synchronization of flow and beat. You're dope, dude.

That's wonderful to hear! I was actually experimenting with some new EQ plug-ins, so I'm really glad you liked it. :y:

by **SpiderDiaze** » Oct 9th, '13, 15:34

Eedee wrote:Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=164157#p2332539

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DduLfaT3Xuk

Audio link: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=164200

(00:19)
Time is of the essence, the longer it takes us
This journey that we're on, the stronger it makes us.
Patience is a virtue, we hustle and yawn
Till we're exhausted and drop down, thunder from God
Echoes in our ears, a reminder in song
Comes in the form of drums booming, then lightning applauds.
And it strikes in our hearts, look up - the Sun's looming
Over top of our goals, doubt is our undoing.

(1:00)
Humans tend to sway so hither and thither
Until we open our eyes and see the picture is bigger.
Stupid till the day that we open our minds,
Enterin' information and just hopin' we're right.
Till our lights turn off and our lips don't move,
Fight until you taste blood and spit yo' tooth.
Spill your life into the pavement or create your own,
Fight back if they're racin' to erase your home.

(1:30)
Sometimes the journey that we take is hard,
Sometimes it's needed to erase the scars.
Sometimes the feeling that we came so far
Is overshadowed by the fact who we say we are
Is no different than the versions that we dream to be,
Diverted by diversions so diverse with ease
That every direction has been trod before,
So we're Set in our ways, like a god of war.
But then we lift our eyes and we can see the sky
And that feeling deep inside? It can keep alive
The key to our cell, but we keep dividin',
Till we breathe divine and we can see horizons...

Admire you're rhyming skills, second verse is unreal best part imo. Going to learn from this take a few notes from it, just reading through it you can picture a story from it in your head. Be looking out for more work from you in the future. Great stuff. :y: