Kanye Is Dead

by **Slim Fiasco** » Oct 24th, '13, 20:16

LOF - viewtopic.php?f=24&t=165273&p=2401108#p2401108

In a time of small dicks and fake titties I'm the realest
Drawing sounds with my mind like the Gorrilaz
Patrolling drug infected neighborhoods on a daily basis
Dressed as a dead cop killer, you can't erase this
Right about now you're wondering how would that look like?
Well imagine your little sister reading a book right
And then add me force-fucking her cat with this good mic
Goddamn were those last 3 lines awful
Yet I get to eat a hot pussy like a waffle
Meaning I'm a mean MC overdosed on talent
But if I was a knight I'd never be gallant
Expect for maybe if I was Batman's son
Fucking up his "won't kill" rule with a gun
Then spreading the love with two sharp knives
Slicing off Catwoman's nipples as if she was my wife
On that note will you fucking marry me, bitch?
That's right Kim, I'm talking to you, Ye's dead in a ditch

by **Eedee** » Oct 25th, '13, 06:55

Lol I liked this. You had a nice opening line and it carried on throughout.

by **Slim Fiasco** » Oct 25th, '13, 10:22

Eedee wrote:Lol I liked this. You had a nice opening line and it carried on throughout.

THanks bro, it was something I did quickly, just messing around, lol.

by **Just Silver** » Oct 26th, '13, 00:53

i liked the beginning but some lines made barely any sense like batmans son and the nipple wife
but had a decent flow

cool imagery at parts i suggest u try to be more descriptive its your niche :y:

good stuff maybe feed my piece :flower:

by **Slim Fiasco** » Oct 26th, '13, 09:36

Just Silver wrote:i liked the beginning but some lines made barely any sense like batmans son and the nipple wife
but had a decent flow

cool imagery at parts i suggest u try to be more descriptive its your niche

good stuff maybe feed my piece

Batman is also know as The Dark Knight so that connects with the previous line; and with the wife thing I was alluding that I have previously sliced off my wife's nipples, and that I'm doing the same thing to Catwoman now. But yeah, I was just having fun with it, writing random ish and all.

Thanks for the feedback though, I'll try to feed your piece :b:

by **CanadaPure** » Oct 28th, '13, 21:16

I really liked the start, but it kinda slowly fell off for me. Either way, I did enjoy reading it, I just think it was a little bit inconsistent. But if you did it quickly and messing around I completely understand.

by **Slim Fiasco** » Oct 29th, '13, 09:21

CanadaPure wrote:I really liked the start, but it kinda slowly fell off for me. Either way, I did enjoy reading it, I just think it was a little bit inconsistent. But if you did it quickly and messing around I completely understand.

Yeah, it was like that, haha. So thanks, I appreciate the feedback

by **Kenneth Kaniff** » Nov 16th, '13, 01:16

It started off pretty damn good, but it started to confuse me a bit later on and it seemed like you stretched a bit for rhyming. Then again, it can all be in the enunciation, so I won't have that as a legitimate complaint.

The whole Batman/Catwoman thing was a bit strange and disturbing, but I assume that's what you were going for, so nice job. :y: