Perfectly Delivered (2 Endings)

[Slim Fiasco]

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Perfectly delivered lyrics, bulletproof to critics
High off thought experiments, my DNA is in a clinic
I'm chronically ill using words that sonically kill
The sounds waves I breathe filter the air with steal
Supernova neurons cause my brain to radiate powers
Watch your stereos explode, your headphones devour
Killing beats, give 'em hell and send 'em to heaven
Beheaded melodies end up like the ending of Se7en
Tendencies of a Buddhist this is microphone meditation
I'm 2Pac out on bail hitting you up with no temptations
My destiny remastered, I'm the master of intelligence
If Jesus was my homie I would be Judas as a president
With the Devil in my oval office, officially pimped out
Mobilizing gang members making them the new Marines
Armed with army weapons, my orders are deadly schemes
And that bitches is how history books tattoo evil names
Call to Iraq - bring back the tanks, let's see DC in flames

Alternate ending:

Perfectly delivered lyrics, bulletproof to critics
High off thought experiments, my DNA is in a clinic
I'm chronically ill using words that sonically kill
The sounds waves I breathe filter the air with steal
Supernova neurons cause my brain to radiate powers
Watch your stereos explode, your headphones devour
Killing beats, give 'em hell and send 'em to heaven
Beheaded melodies end up like the ending of Se7en
Tendencies of a Buddhist this is microphone meditation
I'm 2Pac out on bail hitting you up with no temptations
My destiny remastered, I'm the master of intelligence
If Jesus was my homie I would be Judas as a president
With the Devil in my oval office, officially pimped out
Paint the white house red and spread anarchy throughout
The whole nation, I'm Dr. Faust surviving the damnation
Ready to sell my soul before it gets cursed with inspiration

[Just Silver]

I also liked the wording in this one I could tell this was more of a keystyle
Which is what im into lately lol

Had a decent flow imo

The history book line I didn't quite understand near the end

Overall I liked this and just try to keep on writing

[Slim Fiasco]

I also liked the wording in this one I could tell this was more of a keystyle
Which is what im into lately lol

Had a decent flow imo

The history book line I didn't quite understand near the end

Overall I liked this and just try to keep on writing

Thanks bro, I appreciate that! The last line was kinda rushed, I guess what I meant is that people that have done horrible things (like Hitler) are icons in a negative connotation, but they're still recognizable and will always be remembered. So I compared that with my lyrics.

As for writing more, I mainly do it in my native language, but it's fun to do it on English every now and then.

[Just Silver]

It's really good if this is your second language

[Francesco]

Wow nice one my man... nice vocab. You went political too...

[Slim Fiasco]

Thanks guys, much love.

[Slim Fiasco]

I came up with another ending, you guys can check it out

[Chalky]

You got talent bruh I can tell ur gonna go far in life .

[Francesco]

Anytime my dude...
I like the second one too!

[Slim Fiasco]

THanks a lot to both of you, it means a lot!

[Francesco]

Again... no problem at all. Keep 'em coming!