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Re: jacking silver title

Postby Spyder » Feb 20th, '14, 03:00

Torture*

But step ya game up for that silver bra ;)
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Re: jacking silver title

Postby Mr.DGAF » Feb 21st, '14, 23:57

Aw yis. I like it. I always love the pieces that drop in CW before a tournament starts. Lots of people get fired up and it usually makes the battles more interesting too. This was a nice drop, you've gotten heaps better since I last read your solo pieces. I thought the opening bars and perspective switch also added a lot of creativity to it overall.
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Re: jacking silver title

Postby Dewey Decimal » Feb 22nd, '14, 01:01

This was dope , really liked the Beginning
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Re: jacking silver title

Postby Just Silver » Mar 3rd, '14, 16:42

This was decent Ive seen better from you this felt like a generic before a tournament verse no offense

It had a great flow just lacked your style it felt as if a different member was saying it if that makes sense
Try to find your trademark and stick to it not entirely but find that comfort zone
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