The TRshady Forum became read-only in December 2014. The 10 year history will live on, in this archive.
Continue the discussion with the new home for the Eminem and Hip Hop discussion: HipHopShelter.com.

genetics by the gram

Want to share a poem, story or a moving article? Share creative literature text here.

Re: genetics by the gram

Postby Just Silver » Feb 14th, '14, 16:02

Thanks broski
Image
User avatar
Just Silver
Band Leader
Band Leader
 
Posts: 7791
Joined: Jun 27th, '09, 03:40
Location: East Coast
Gender: Male

Re: genetics by the gram

Postby Just Silver » Feb 16th, '14, 19:12

Thanks its good to know you felt this piece
Image
User avatar
Just Silver
Band Leader
Band Leader
 
Posts: 7791
Joined: Jun 27th, '09, 03:40
Location: East Coast
Gender: Male

Re: genetics by the gram

Postby Mr.DGAF » Feb 17th, '14, 00:01

Pretty good drop dude. I really liked the scheme switch in the first four bars. The tell a cop/out of hand part flowed really well because of that. You had some really dope lines too; the half life/twice my age line was pretty dope mane. Good ish. I don't think every piece you do should be personal, but they are typically your best verses. Can't say too much else, good stuff.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

Image
Image
Quest for Six
Team Emma Stone
Buns till amazing... :')
User avatar
Mr.DGAF
Renegade
Renegade
 
Posts: 2349
Joined: Aug 15th, '11, 04:10
Location: In the back seat of your truck, with duct tape stretched out.
Gender: Male

Re: genetics by the gram

Postby Just Silver » Feb 17th, '14, 00:06

Thanks guy best feed so far :y:
Image
User avatar
Just Silver
Band Leader
Band Leader
 
Posts: 7791
Joined: Jun 27th, '09, 03:40
Location: East Coast
Gender: Male

Re: genetics by the gram

Postby SandMan » Mar 24th, '14, 00:31

Nice piece dude. This is the first one I have read on this forum but here is my 2 cents, the emotion is good now I think that if you took a little extra time and incorporated some more multis in there the piece would go from good to great. Nice job though keep it up
SandMan
Closet Cleaner
Closet Cleaner
 
Posts: 40
Joined: Mar 24th, '14, 00:02

Previous

Return to Creative Writing



Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users