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VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby VenomBlackViper » Jun 1st, '11, 19:49

Sentus

I’m a shogun knight; I go to fights throwin knives
The ghost of Mike, I’ll reveal myself when the moments right
Fuck the goals in life
If I reached for the stars I’d immediately strip the globe o’ light
A cyborg prototype
Constructed with reverse engineering in a Roswell clonin site
No sober life; I’m blood drunk off red rum
Decapitate me and within a second a new head’s sprung
A shaolin red monk
Survivin in the Mojave Desert off of dead skunks and bread crumbs
I shred lungs of beasts then tear inside the belly
You want a pretty girl? Come to my lair, I’m hidin plenty
My trail leaves despair with violence spreading
Beware we’re ridin steady on the Mares of Diomedes
Kill myself and then bury the carcass
I was born in Duat only to die in Hesperides’ Garden

VBV

Sick pig developin' swine
From a devilish tribe dressed in goat horns & elephent hide
I'll sever your spine for making statements of the irrelevant kind
Not on the same page with my book of thoughts like Jekyll & Hyde
Boarded up windows to my second mind
Result of premature ejaculation, I came ahead of my time
You lay it on wax & i'll burn it, that's the only way i'm saying your records hot
I get different strokes of genius when i have second thoughts
Nefarious, vicious
Fuck pushing the envelope I strap letter bombs to carrier pigeons
To drop on temples & shrines of various religions
At funerals I play colostemy bagpipes & human organs
If I enter a church i'm either burning it down or getting a new extortion
On Sundays I tutor Mormons on how to do abortions
Giving sluts early periods when I eat pussy, my tooth edge is jagged
All hail Venom & Sentus, the Two Headed Dragon

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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby iain08 » Jun 2nd, '11, 05:32

What the fuck.
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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jun 2nd, '11, 07:01

This was sickkk!! Very refreshing to read something like this :y: and usually on collabs one person goes harder than the other but you two both went in equally.. I'm pick some of my favorite lines, but it was really difficult to do just that since the whole thing was raw as hell.

Sentus
As much as I loved the opening of your verse wit all dem mutlies, I liked the way this flowed better:

"No sober life; I’m blood drunk off red rum
Decapitate me and within a second a new head’s sprung
A shaolin red monk
Survivin in the Mojave Desert off of dead skunks and bread crumbs"

had me sayin' hollyy shit out loud haha

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Like Sentus, I liked the way you opened your verse with the "devilish tribe" "elephant hide" (clever rhyming) mutlies, but I enjoyed the parts of your verse that had what you do best; wordplay

"Nefarious, vicious
Fuck pushing the envelope I strap letter bombs to carrier pigeons
To drop on temples & shrines of various religions"

just awesome..

"Result of premature ejaculation, I came ahead of my time
You lay it on wax & i'll burn it, that's the only way i'm saying your records hot"

pretty basic stuff, but you add your own twist to make it your very own and all the more sicker!


Overall, it was a solid piece. You two should collab more. It reminded me of Em & Royce (maybe of TRShady) haha whether who's Royce and who's Em, you two can fight it out lol
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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby Atone » Jun 2nd, '11, 07:49

the main reason i like this, because your using alot of that wu tang type shit, love it, that first verse is tight, and the second verse is equal, i love the topic you used.
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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby Block » Jun 3rd, '11, 02:55

WTF. I didn't know VBV was that good.

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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby Spyder » Jun 3rd, '11, 04:49

vbv :shifty:

nice premi ejac line hahha

pretty nice piece

class nothing special, seemed like alot of rhymes i would read form you ya know

vbv i havent checked out much of your cw work but this was nice
had some nice punches in there and all good man
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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby Xray » Jun 3rd, '11, 09:50

VenomBlackViper wrote:Sentus
A cyborg prototype
Constructed with reverse engineering in a Roswell clonin site
No sober life; I’m blood drunk off red rum
Decapitate me and within a second a new head’s sprung
A shaolin red monk
Survivin in the Mojave Desert off of dead skunks and bread crumbs


VBV
Sick pig developin' swine
From a devilish tribe dressed in goat horns & elephent hide
Boarded up windows to my second mind
Result of premature ejaculation, I came ahead of my time
Fuck pushing the envelope I strap letter bombs to carrier pigeons
To drop on temples & shrines of various religions


Good shit. Some filler lines here and there from both camps but overall good shit.
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Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby MikeNUFC » Jun 4th, '11, 01:22

Class, honestly your flow was absolutely insane, flowed like a river. Rhyming was great and the content was well executed horrorcore

VBV, I'd say the same except I lost your flow a bit, you seemd to drag a few lines onto long. But your rhyming was great except for one or two lines which I felt seemed a bit forced ("hot/thought"? - although that could be an accent thing)
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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jun 4th, '11, 01:40

MikeNUFC wrote: ("hot/thought"? - although that could be an accent thing)


lmao it is most definitely an accent thing. Hot and thought rhyme perfectly in America (I know you're not from America, you're from London right?). How do you pronounce the two, I'm curious?
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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby ChristinaE12 » Jun 4th, '11, 03:42

Nice piece. Also fun to read. Nothing much really to say here that's not been already said. Otherwise, you two know pretty much whatever there is to know.
"If Life's a bitch and revenge is sweet... I'm the sweetest bitch you'll ever meet."

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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby VenomBlackViper » Jun 4th, '11, 20:15

@Mike yeah it's definitely a accent thing, over in the UK it's pronounced "thorght" while over here it's pronounced "thaught"

Appreciate the feedback from all you ni.ggers :b:

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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby VenomBlackViper » Jun 10th, '11, 17:49

Bump cuz this deserves more feedback tbh.
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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby Maybe » Jun 10th, '11, 17:56

Easily one of the best songs I've ever read on the site. I won't delve to deeply in to specifics (because you both obviously know that it's good), but I will say:

Venom: You are one of--if not the best--rhymer on this website. You have such a great grasp of multies and how/where to use them that it's shocking. Your content isn't always my cup of tea, but your imaginary coupled with your interesting flow makes for amazing pieces regardless of subject matter.

Class: I still can't believe some of the things you make rhyme. Not often am I caught off guard by a line that seems simple, but ends up being unpredictably complex (and generally awesome). You too have an interesting way with words, but you really shine when you touch subjects most people don't, as you manage to make the oddest situations clear and rhythmic.
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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby classthe_king » Jun 10th, '11, 18:23

Wow thanks man, that means a lot.
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Re: VBV and Sentus - Two Headed Dragon

Postby Yah-hah » Jun 10th, '11, 20:47

I always like seein wat class an cole come up with. The mormon line best in whole song very good
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