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[LP Track 3] Too late for this Ft. Mr.DGAF

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Re: [LP Track 3] Too late for this Ft. Mr.DGAF

Postby J.R. » Sep 15th, '11, 22:36

Mr.DGAF wrote:Good shit B.Nutz. Really felt the emotion on this one. Even still, the rhyming was pretty good. Internal multis and solid multis. But the high point on your verse is the emotion, which I figured it would be given the type of track. Funny how similar our verses ended up. Favorite part:

God called you up, You had no choice but to accept,
Mom saw enough, Call me moist but I fucking wept,


Zabe, sucks your verse was dropped. For what it was, I liked it. Granted, it didn't gel with the other verses too well, but ultimately it was a fun verse. And haha, fellow nerdish guy here. :y:


Basically the same right back at you, I like alot of what you did, Rhyming is sub-par but sometimes it's gotta be sacrificed.

Favorite part:

During the nights, I’d think
About the times we shared
For in the fights, we’d blink
And now we both not there
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