Mmm..I found myself stretching words to flow properly..
Other then that, it was really good to read along to with the beat.
It depends with how YOU want to approach the beat though.
I know there is other ways.
Geno - One Mic & A Dream
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Re: Geno - One Mic & A Dream
by mdemaz » Dec 14th, '11, 06:53
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Just Silver wrote:I think every guy should massage their prostate at least once
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Re: Geno - One Mic & A Dream
by Spyder » Dec 15th, '11, 18:46
to me the punches were very weak, just being honest
"like semen in penis, they peace when i bet them... i mean cmon bra
the two syllable mutlis throughout the first few bars through me off too man.
deff not your best piece
"like semen in penis, they peace when i bet them... i mean cmon bra
the two syllable mutlis throughout the first few bars through me off too man.
deff not your best piece
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Re: Geno - One Mic & A Dream
by Spyder » Dec 15th, '11, 20:38
No re-spect for re-jects who seem fresh, wear v-necks,
And cease when I speak 'cause it's easy for me, man,
Like semin in penis - they peace when I beat them!
bold = multies
italicized = inners
no way is that full bar rhymes
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Re: Geno - One Mic & A Dream
by RainMan44 » Dec 16th, '11, 04:20
Hmm. This was interesting. This is definitely different from other pieces I've read from you. Switched it up a bit here, that's a plus. 
I really thought, rhyming wise, this shit was on point. You've pretty much got that part down. And the flow, well, it came off naturally. That shows it's very well structured. Also, it gives me an impression that this was meant to be delivered in a "tough/hard hitting" kind of delivery. That's just what I got from reading it. It'd be interesting to see how you deliver it, can't wait to hear your recorded material if/when you plan on recording in the future.
My favorite thing about this piece had to be the repeated sounds throughout the verse(s). It was stuffed with 'em.
Overall, this was an all around solid drop. Flow and rhyme, and just the attitude I envisioned this being delivered in was dope.
Keep at it brah
P.S, I wrote a verse to this beat as well, so it was interesting to see how two people come up with a different product on the same beat. I will post mine soon.
I really thought, rhyming wise, this shit was on point. You've pretty much got that part down. And the flow, well, it came off naturally. That shows it's very well structured. Also, it gives me an impression that this was meant to be delivered in a "tough/hard hitting" kind of delivery. That's just what I got from reading it. It'd be interesting to see how you deliver it, can't wait to hear your recorded material if/when you plan on recording in the future.
My favorite thing about this piece had to be the repeated sounds throughout the verse(s). It was stuffed with 'em.
Overall, this was an all around solid drop. Flow and rhyme, and just the attitude I envisioned this being delivered in was dope.
Keep at it brah
P.S, I wrote a verse to this beat as well, so it was interesting to see how two people come up with a different product on the same beat. I will post mine soon.
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."
GOAT
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."
GOAT
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Re: Geno - One Mic & A Dream
by mdemaz » Dec 16th, '11, 04:32
Geno wrote:mdemaz wrote:Mmm..I found myself stretching words to flow properly..
Other then that, it was really good to read along to with the beat.
It depends with how YOU want to approach the beat though.
I know there is other ways.
Which words?
Now feelin' so queasy, feedin' a fetus,
It's Eazy to see, like Tomica on beaches.
Well, at least I never did that.
Maybe it would sound different if it was slow, slow, fast, fast, slow, slow and etc...
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Re: Geno - One Mic & A Dream
by Spyder » Dec 18th, '11, 00:48
Geno wrote:I pause at the commas if it helps lol
yes a comma means pause...
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Re: Geno - One Mic & A Dream
by Spyder » Dec 18th, '11, 00:57
yes
its basic english grammar that a comma means pause
its basic english grammar that a comma means pause
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Re: Geno - One Mic & A Dream
by mdemaz » Dec 18th, '11, 09:10
Slight pause..
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Re: Geno - One Mic & A Dream
by Sam. » Dec 18th, '11, 19:30
Geno wrote:I pause at the commas if it helps lol
Not sure if ...
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