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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Yah-hah » Aug 4th, '10, 03:33

Thnks for the feed Steven and CJ :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby classthe_king » Aug 4th, '10, 20:17

oh it will
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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Yah-hah » Aug 5th, '10, 05:03

pm me a beat
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Peace_Maker » Aug 6th, '10, 08:09

Yah-Hah:

Sick imagery, good multies, your rhymes weren't cohesive though. Like you throw in rhymes that are unneeded. I think switching up your multies every 2-4 lines and making them shorter would fix that. Still sick stuff, I'm just scrutinizing.

Class_TheKing:

You have the same problem with your rhymes being cohesive. Still you also have the sick imagery and multies. I hated the rhyme "mystical myst". The "dragon scale" rhymes were sick though. Good guest verse, you followed him perfectly.

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Good collab. I'm a fan of this type of stuff.
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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Yah-hah » Aug 6th, '10, 11:04

Yeah its the way I flow I'm rap fast so I use alot of multis that probably arent needed but when I flow it it works lol but I get wat your sayin. thanks for the feed homie
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby BILI » Aug 6th, '10, 12:32

Peace_Maker wrote:Good collab. I'm a fan of this type of stuff.

Sure you are Cole


Anyways it was dope,I liked this type of shit,Multies were :worship: from both of you.Loved that nazi line from Class :y:
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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby classthe_king » Aug 6th, '10, 20:59

Peace_Maker wrote:You have the same problem with your rhymes being cohesive. Still you also have the sick imagery and multies. I hated the rhyme "mystical myst". The "dragon scale" rhymes were sick though. Good guest verse, you followed him perfectly.


How should I fix my rhymes?
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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Peace_Maker » Aug 7th, '10, 02:39

Erase em, they suck.
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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby classthe_king » Aug 7th, '10, 02:50

Peace_Maker wrote:Erase em, they suck.

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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Xray » Aug 7th, '10, 06:02

That was fucking dope. Yah you had some crazy fucking lines man.

"Hit you with so many hands you wont know wat time it is" crazy.

Class, your drop was on the same level.

"Just to add a note I’ll tell you as I slice n beat ya
Welcome to my butcher shop it was nice to meet ya"

Really nice collab.
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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Yah-hah » Aug 7th, '10, 06:27

Yeah I feel like both of our verses complimented eachothers :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Yah-hah » Aug 15th, '10, 18:33

You ever gonna show me the beat??
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby classthe_king » Aug 15th, '10, 19:21

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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Yah-hah » Aug 18th, '10, 14:46

Haha I love that song :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
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Re: Grim Reaper Smile ft Class the king

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 19th, '10, 10:21

Dude this was just fukin INSANE, as good as it gets rite here on our very own trshady

yah first verse reminded me on that "underground" flow, i think its one of your best man, right up there with some other select few, nothing wrong with it at all.Some times filler lines NEED to be there, otherwise people end up sounding like anonymous-non stop organised nonsense,lol , allways a fan of your work but this was surreal.

Class...Dude that just blew me away-PAUSE
lol for real tho, ive seen alot of stuff of yours and honestly i think you did you name justice, You sir are in a class of your own. Amazing verse, ending was tight :y:

Excellent drop...like down right AWESOME
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