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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby B.A.D. » Jan 29th, '12, 12:19

again the same bullshit.

Atone, you are never going to improve that way, Its amazing how many times this has to be stressed. Stop concentrating on the un-worthy posts, is the only thing you do. People provide you with feedback and you only answer to the posts that threat you. You don give even give a single Thank you to people who try to help. Instead you bring the same shit up all the time about your fans and all that, and to be honest man, its really not hating, but I can not help but too quickly dissmis you as a 1. Compulsive Liar or 2. A Class Spammer. I see what you do, you have loads of accounts on social platforms, and you work around in inking it back to you, now, that is a good move, the only problem is that people arrive with illusion and leave with diss-appointment. Now, the reason people hate is exactly that, your attitude. so you don't really deserve any feedback at all if you are like that and keep doing what you do. Instead of focusing on improving the actual art, you concentrate on building up your ego.

and let me put it in a simple manner. It is impossible to believe someone will enjoy listening to your music, because of the simple fact that its terribly executed. you dont even rap to a beat man, which is what hip hop is built around. flowing to a beat, and you don't.... simple as that.

So people start feeding, but they end up hating not because of just being haters. But because of how you portray yourself to people who at start try to help.

so if you really want to improve, change you attitude and listen to what people tell you.

thats all
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby CrashBand » Feb 19th, '12, 09:20

quite simple rhymes tbh.
i found this piece quite hard to flow, but you may have it sussed when actually rapping it.
other then that not too bad, not amazing either, keep at it and keep improving
I'm not tryin to be rude, but I sincerely wanna fuck the taste out of your mouth
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