"Third time" -- Will RTF

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I was refraining from posting lyrics, but I figured I'd post this up for ya'll since I broke up with my girl and wrote this.. Think what you will.

It was written and recorded to this:
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=7364259

Yes, it's recorded but I sent it to get mixed since I'mma throw it on the EP. (Leased the beat, of course)


"Third Time"

You can run away,
but it won't change you
you can run away

You know I'm not the type to ever harbor a grudge..
it's hard enough to live while you're part of the rust
you chip away from the paint that departed from us..
heads a little heavy so i rest it on my palms,
let the tears fall rain calms every little drop
of the same song...
Then I'll float into another abyss
another systematic vision with a history,
this could be instantly, every single dream you've ever had..
you could never love me when you're mad
but I'll try to win you back, (scouts honor) hahah..
I could never lie about that..
Maybe if I could I wouldn't be in this position I'm in
I'm, positioning myself
just to reach a little love, up on top of the shelf
I'll, open old wounds, cause hand-me-down scars
with a second-hand fear that would stab me in the heart,
I'm innocent (innocent), I taste it on your lip
with your hand tied-bravery chasing on your hip
it's unsavory, my favor-ite position is this
your, tail between your legs while you're chomping at the bit
You can dig another hole just to find a place to.. sit..
And yo let me tell you what the truth is,
truth is if ever-y lie, were a bullet you'd be toothless,
pull it.. tell me how it feels when you do this..
I blind-date hatred disfusing what is useless
a trigger mechanism on my two lips, I use it
as a new gift to center myself,
mental health ain't an issue..
If it really was I wouldn't miss you..
Maybe I don't...
maybe I just lied to you,
I like to watch you run away trying not to hide the proof
stained inside your innocense, (is that something I would do)?
maybe it is.. The blame is all yours,
turn that pretty little face into a crown of thorns
you can pierce me in the side, while you're running out the door
I don't need you anymore
(I don't need you anymore)


You can run away,
but it won't change you
you can run away

You can run away,
but it won't change you
you can run away

You can run away,
but it won't change you
you can run away


I fed steven's piece and Fa-Q's. I don't have links, but ehh..

[Slim's Shady]

I'm gonna feed this just because it's so beautiful. First of all I wish I could relate to this but my last girlfriend was in 7th grade, we broke up but it's not like "losing the other half of you" or "losing true love" so

Enough about me lol...this was like a poem with a more complex rhyme schemes and multis. Definitely relatable, and more than just saying "I miss you", it's kinda like has an "I miss you but I don't need you" vibe to it. Rhymes were good for this type of song...I wouldn't expect crazy multis on a song like this. I liked the beat.

Overall 9/10. Highest score I've given thus far

[classthe_king]

Honestly I couldn't follow your flow at all, but you're an experienced rapper so I trust that you got it lol
Loved the song though, the lyrics were touching and deffinitely relateable.

This is one of the best beats I've ever heard though, woah. I haven't heard you rap at all so I hope you don't ruin it lol, this song could easily be classic.

Don't rtf in cw lol

[Block]

I'm gonna feed this just because it's so beautiful. First of all I wish I could relate to this but my last girlfriend was in 7th grade, we broke up but it's not like "losing the other half of you" or "losing true love" so

Enough about me lol...this was like a poem with a more complex rhyme schemes and multis. Definitely relatable, and more than just saying "I miss you", it's kinda like has an "I miss you but I don't need you" vibe to it. Rhymes were good for this type of song...I wouldn't expect crazy multis on a song like this. I liked the beat.

Overall 9/10. Highest score I've given thus far

Wow, thanks man. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Be sure to check out the actual song when I post it up.

Honestly I couldn't follow your flow at all, but you're an experienced rapper so I trust that you got it lol
Loved the song though, the lyrics were touching and deffinitely relateable.

This is one of the best beats I've ever heard though, woah. I haven't heard you rap at all so I hope you don't ruin it lol, this song could easily be classic.

Don't rtf in cw lol

Haha, maybe tells me that all the time, "Dude I can't catch your flow what the fuck" until I rap it to him over a beat, then he's like "OHHH". But yeah, man.. Idk, I guess I have a very uniqu flow. I pause in weird spots, haha. And my structure when writing lyrics doesn't really reflect that to most people.

I'm glad you liked the lyrics, man. I'm really glad it's relateable, as well. I wanted people to be able to relate to it, and not have a bunch of metaphorical stuff going on.

As for the beat, I know right? I heard it and had to write something to it. I'll try to live up to the expectations the beat has, haha.



I'll retun the feed to both of you. Thanks again.

[Sir_Machete']

Favorite lines:

You know I'm not the type to ever harbor a grudge..
it's hard enough to live while you're part of the rust

this could be instantly, every single dream you've ever had..
you could never love me when you're mad
but I'll try to win you back, (scouts honor) hahah..
I could never lie about that..
Maybe if I could I wouldn't be in this position I'm in
I'm, positioning myself
just to reach a little love, up on top of the shelf

tail between your legs while you're chomping at the bit
You can dig another hole just to find a place to.. sit..
And yo let me tell you what the truth is,
truth is if ever-y lie, were a bullet you'd be toothless,


Mann i know exactly what you mean bro', i also had similar concepts, couple funny bars too kinda like eminem's point of view in his past relationships. even though this was a very emotion piece, deep ass beat. Rhyme scheme was on point for your flow. I can't wait to actually hear the recording of this though 9.1/10 overall.

[Block]

Thanks for the feed. I'll get at one of yours.

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Bumping.