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UPDATED: In The Morning Freestyle Ft ENIMEE

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 20th, '10, 13:31

Aiyo, its been a long time since ive posted here. Wanted to do something different this time, apart from the whole anti-world thing,lol This is my "love song" , umm a mix between J Cole's In the morning and 50 Cents 21 questions...literally.

Instrumental for those who get the flow, It hurries up towards the end of each bar,lol

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MTPWFglnDiA


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Baby, youre like the summer time bloom,
i like the way you open
Youre like the one that I'd choose,
If i was in that moment
Slow Jams n the way you move,
It makes me wana wan' it
Youre not the one I'd wana loose,
Take my hand n jus' hold it

(Okay stop)
(This. Is. Ma. Love. Song)
(Lets. Go.)

Im tryina figure you all out, if you'd take me in and let me
Are you the kind to up and leave, when i said i wana let be,
Do you smoke or get high, are those the routes you use to fly?
Talk to God thru the shrooms, its just a question, no need to lie
Are you the kind that likes her man, as manly as they come
Hairy Chests & pot belly's, the wife beatin' kinda scum
Are you the kind that cooks and clean, for her husband when he comes
Or do you make him take you out even when he cant afford to pay for 1
Do you wana have kids? How many would you like to have?
What would you call 'em if you did? Maybe a Sarah or a Jack
Are you the kind that stays in bed? With you're head on ma chest
Talking about our future, laughing at all the stories that id tell
Are you the kind that defies the times, and hates days like valentine
or do you prefer the extravagance? Another day to say "you're mine"
Would you be open to something new? Things you havnt tried before
Would you be willing to get rowdy, drop those jeans and get on your fours
Would it hurt you if i left? Just walked up straight up out the door
Streams of tears, the phone calls beggin, to not be angry and come home
Would you believe me if i told you? "You're the ONLY one ive had"
Does it freak you out that ive been single, or does that make you glad?
My friends've been sayin Shady's fallin, Im just tryina take this all in
Im just sayin all the things, that'll make you wana wake up next to me... (In The Morning x10)


Enimee:

i wake up in the mornin, yawnin tryna figure out what ima put on then
thoughts juck back to last night, and how we got on darlin
so star struck, i just cant seem to believe that this happened to me
the girl of my dreams, layed up in the same bed naked, happily
huggin on my chest, all day long me and you could cuddle and carress
this will defnitly go down, as one of the best, plus im blessed
this transaction of love, it took just one night to feel this magical lust
and with each clavical thrust, i feel more enthralled trapped in the dusk
untill dawn, still hard, still shakin, and we still goin, like oh, oh oh
oh oh, here we go, she got me on top and i feel so ready to blow
like
oh, oh oh oh oh oh oh


UPDATE: Added verse from Enimee, check it out guys!!!

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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby Devil'sAdvocate » Nov 20th, '10, 22:01

dope drop
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby Just Silver » Nov 20th, '10, 22:20

Idk about it to be honest
It was very different it was a good drop but not too much my taste

8/10 :b:
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 21st, '10, 11:08

haha Thanks brothas! I just wanted to try something different
waitin on some more people to give me a complete idea as to how i shud percieve this verse,lol
Thnx for your feed back, i appreciate it!
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby toxicbuffy » Nov 21st, '10, 18:10

i felt it :) Id say 8/10 also !! Keep up the good work
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 21st, '10, 19:36

toxicbuffy wrote:i felt it :) Id say 8/10 also !! Keep up the good work


Youre a sweetheart for checkin it out!
Thank you for youre feedback, i truly appreciate it,lol
Wheres everybody else at?!
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby ChristinaE12 » Nov 21st, '10, 20:38

Definitely different. For around here.. Which is a good thing to always see.

I like how it has a point to it. It isn't just bullshit stuff. It actually has purpose and meaning. It seemed to flow well too. And above all, it's relatable. Which also makes things better.

Overall, I liked it and think it is a decent piece.
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby NicoleEM » Nov 21st, '10, 23:14

You are hitting for the mainstream audience? :shifty:
JK ,tho is pretty short ,i like it,the flow seems good on that instrumental,has a story,girls could def relate to it :D
I'd say 8/10 too ,good work :y:
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 22nd, '10, 04:13

Nice to see ya ass writin some shit. Was good never seen that side from ya it's nice. I think it's good too see a vulnerable side of a person to really get into the piece. Very good imagery. Had to put my turban on to really get the flow and lines were a bit long towards the end. I would never write lines that long ;) Dope drop homie
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 22nd, '10, 14:12

ChristinaD12 wrote:Definitely different. For around here.. Which is a good thing to always see.

I like how it has a point to it. It isn't just bullshit stuff. It actually has purpose and meaning. It seemed to flow well too. And above all, it's relatable. Which also makes things better.

Overall, I liked it and think it is a decent piece.


Haha, yea i tried to write about the things aii wana ask a girl before i take things seriously. so im glad that you relate to it. Thank you soooo much for youre feedback!

NicoleEM wrote:You are hitting for the mainstream audience? :shifty:
JK ,tho is pretty short ,i like it,the flow seems good on that instrumental,has a story,girls could def relate to it :D
I'd say 8/10 too ,good work :y:



hahahaha, not any time soon miss!, this is basically for my high school reunion, i have a couple girls id like to show this to and go "IN YO' FAYCE BIATCH!!!! LOOK AT WHATCHU LEFT" lmao, im jus messin, hahahahahaha I apppreciate youre feedback! THANK YOU!!

Lello18 wrote:yo it's amazing homie!!! :worship:

Since u said it's first tiem u wrote bout this subject, then you should defiently try all sorts of subjects, cause u nailed this one!!

shukran ya azeezi!
Ima try and be a bit more diverse my second time around,lol thank you for peepin this!


Yah-hah wrote:Nice to see ya ass writin some shit. Was good never seen that side from ya it's nice. I think it's good too see a vulnerable side of a person to really get into the piece. Very good imagery. Had to put my turban on to really get the flow and lines were a bit long towards the end. I would never write lines that long ;) Dope drop homie


haha yea i can digg the long lines, but that was cause i was more into the meaning (as allways) :P , aiyo thank you man, it means alot to me that YOU think its dope, glad you liked it brotha!

AIyo keep the feeds rollin peeps!
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby BILI » Nov 22nd, '10, 14:32

Glad to see more cats droppin in CW

I could flow it to that beat,its nice that you posted it cause it only gives something more to all the emotions.Rhymes were nice,as I said flow seems on point,I really like it.Only thing that I`ll complain about are those long lines.Other then that this was nice :y:
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby mcZu » Nov 22nd, '10, 19:41

Different, sometimes funny, sometimes heartfelt. I do think you didn't do the beat justice, like you jumped from emotion to emotion, while the beat doesn't cover that much emotions to me, at least. Flow was on point from what I could tell, still, it depends on how you flow it. Lyrically it was ok, nothing special, but you did portray what you wanted to portay, I suppose, which is good. You always have this unique style, bro, definitely good for a wider audience. Nice drop, keep at it.
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby gutawafang » Nov 23rd, '10, 01:47

Blahahahahahahaha! Man! :laughing:

I seriously love the random questions though they are pretty relevant to the concept of the song man. I always like songs asking questions rather than answering unquestioned questions. Know I'm saying? :unsure:

I mean, this is good man. I could relate to it. Love songs is good. :y:

Rooms for improvement, I guess the multis is lacking yo. Man, just giving an honest feed man. I don't mean to be typical but I think multis would make it flow better.

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Im just sayin all the things, that'll make you wana wake up next to me

LOL. This flows very good in my head man.

Seriously, keep writing. :)
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 23rd, '10, 18:29

BILI wrote:Glad to see more cats droppin in CW

I could flow it to that beat,its nice that you posted it cause it only gives something more to all the emotions.Rhymes were nice,as I said flow seems on point,I really like it.Only thing that I`ll complain about are those long lines.Other then that this was nice :y:


haha the long lines are supposed to be read a lil quickly towards the end, but i guess shorter lines would definately be easier to flow, Thank you for youre feedback bili! i appreciate it truly!

mcZu wrote:Different, sometimes funny, sometimes heartfelt. I do think you didn't do the beat justice, like you jumped from emotion to emotion, while the beat doesn't cover that much emotions to me, at least. Flow was on point from what I could tell, still, it depends on how you flow it. Lyrically it was ok, nothing special, but you did portray what you wanted to portay, I suppose, which is good. You always have this unique style, bro, definitely good for a wider audience. Nice drop, keep at it.


aiyo thank you for your honest feed man, i duno, my intention for this one wasnt that i was supposed to do it technically, or like do it ONE way. I just wanted to get everything out from inside, like everything about the topic i wanted out, and this is just some of it,lol But seriously i appreciate you takin the time to leave feed!

gutawafang wrote:Blahahahahahahaha! Man! :laughing:

I seriously love the random questions though they are pretty relevant to the concept of the song man. I always like songs asking questions rather than answering unquestioned questions. Know I'm saying? :unsure:

I mean, this is good man. I could relate to it. Love songs is good. :y:

Rooms for improvement, I guess the multis is lacking yo. Man, just giving an honest feed man. I don't mean to be typical but I think multis would make it flow better.

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My friends've been sayin Shady's fallin, Im just tryina take this all in
Im just sayin all the things, that'll make you wana wake up next to me

LOL. This flows very good in my head man.

Seriously, keep writing. :)



Yes i know what youre saying,lol
Multi's arnt really my thing, like id rather stick to gettin my point across with adequete amount of jazz and glitter and NOT over doing it, yada'mean?
Thank you for youre feed guta, i appreciate it!


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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: In The Morning Freestyle

Postby Xray » Nov 24th, '10, 08:06

Sorry for not replying earlier. :sweating:

This was pretty nice man. It's song worthy stuff. Only thing I can say is, some lines didn't feel like they were thought out enough, some lines had too many syllables and it was akward to flow it. Does this have a fast flow? Cause the structure isn't great, I can see a lot of breathing problems recording this, unless you have Eminem's lungs lol. Anyways, you should write more, I see you're taking a lot of breaks here and there from writing, this will cost you, and take you more time to get better. WHENEVER you free, just practice, I know you got a busy schedule, but work harder in finding time. :y:
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