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Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby Audi » Nov 28th, '10, 22:45

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Under cover of night, I just lie in my death bed
Tombstoned and wide eyed like a meth head
Undead, I smash skulls and crush heads
Take the corpses, store em in my bloodshed
Fuck death, reanimated when I died
Broke the restraints, choked the bride of Frakenstein
I can't lie I've been slippin through the shadows
Haunting corn fields & posin as a scarecrow
Bows and arrows, stoned by Pharaohs
I seek death, deep throatin revolver barrels
Fly with sparrows, swim the sharks
Outpacin a wolf pack, yeah I'm beatin the odds
Walk streets as a God, prowl the skies as wretch
Base jump skyward, bungee tied to my neck
Both hands are red, no fingle nails anymore
Lost them all clawing through my coffin door
Last edited by Audi on Nov 28th, '10, 23:27, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby classthe_king » Nov 28th, '10, 23:16

Woaah, that was pretty good.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby Audi » Nov 28th, '10, 23:19

Thanks mate.
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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 28th, '10, 23:32

This is really good, great imagery and multies here and there. Seems unfinished, especially that last line. It seems like its eluding to more but great drop
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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby Audi » Nov 29th, '10, 00:05

It was just a key'd up piece. I stopped when I hit 16.
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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby WakeUpShow » Nov 29th, '10, 00:57

Great imagery. Great Multis. Great Drop.
Good Job :b:
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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby Ka0t1c » Nov 29th, '10, 21:12

i agree with them on this, great imagery, good bars, yet the piece seems incomplete. however, i enjoyed it
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 29th, '10, 21:18

Was good man. Do you speak with an english accent lol some words dont rhyme aswell but they do with an accent I rapped it like in a possessed voice I loved the bloodshed wordplay was real clever
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby Audi » Nov 29th, '10, 21:31

Yah-hah wrote:Was good man. Do you speak with an english accent lol some words dont rhyme aswell but they do with an accent I rapped it like in a possessed voice I loved the bloodshed wordplay was real clever

Oddly enough I wrote this with that accent in mind.
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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 30th, '10, 21:20

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=98550 lol similar title joint I did woth coleon
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Resurrecter Of The Horrorcore

Postby Enimee » Dec 1st, '10, 01:54

wow, dude sick wordplay i loved the bloodshed line, damn, that whole thing was incredible like it was ridiculously deep on for sure horrorcore lol, i mean yeh ur on to somethin wit tthis keep at it bro
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