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first verse in awhile

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first verse in awhile

Postby Imposter » Dec 2nd, '10, 01:40

i wrote this during advertising class so its hasnt been worked with much.. Opinions no matter how bad lol
btw im think bout using this with slaughterhouse (the One) instrumental with the girls hook


You didn’t lose your style I took it/
now your more like a lazy eye, your crooked/
get bookin like you fled the scene/
leaving your girl tied up in a closed off room with an open jug of gasoline/
no resurrection far from perfection/
her brain would be more fucked than a dog crossing an intersection/
I need to ease up let me stop drop and roll/
then go and catch myself on fire/
im like a crack addicts bowl/
my words are only gonna get me higher/
on the pedestal which I stand alone/
like the ugly kid on the playground nobody wants to play with/
im bout to be dethroned/
so I can let my bitch say this
Last edited by Imposter on Dec 2nd, '10, 05:33, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: first verse in awhile

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 2nd, '10, 03:22

dude...you have to separate the lines better....no ones gonna read this :unsure:
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Re: first verse in awhile

Postby Imposter » Dec 2nd, '10, 05:34

lol alrite man
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Re: first verse in awhile

Postby Willy » Dec 2nd, '10, 06:02

Don't punch, jab.
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