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fire in my heart...please feedback

Postby eat_healthy » Feb 4th, '11, 01:32

link of feedback: http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=107404

stupid bitch, started fires in my heart
cupid dreams made of tetris blocks
pliers pulled em apart
but i am strong and i've done myself wrong
but in this song we're gonna be looking from
a different perspective
how do you think she fills
haven' parents that wanna split apart
a sister, that slits her wrists in half
a boyfriend that spits acid and breaks glass
and dumps her for a new piece of arse
a grandma that only just passed
and new learning experience that was a failed class
and then there's me the biggest farce of all
her ex friend thinking that he can ask for more
she tried to commit but it was a chore
that's why she didn't want a lable at all
i thought i was able to give my heart raw
but realistically i'm unstable bein' down and all
and i expected her to stay till
she felt the same way, mutual love
that'd be the day, this pain would go away
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