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Razorblade Salvation

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Razorblade Salvation

Postby WakeUpShow » Feb 10th, '11, 02:38

INSTRUMENTAL: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pv7_vpdlILg


You're hearing a symphony of shortcomings
Just know that depression is forthcoming...
I'm about to reveal my heart so open your mind
I have the abiltiy to conjure up hope in a line
I can predict tragedy when I focus and rhyme
We almost missed salvation but he woke us in time
Nowhere near my potential and I don't care anymore
Becoming apathetic, immoral and many more
Too lazy for missions and hope
it took all I had for this vision of hope
But I can see the light at the end of the tunnel
It gives me hope like the voice of a friend in the rubble
Everything important is falling into place
I've turned all of my appalling sin to grace
While I'm at it, I'll try to save the nation
From the allure of razorblade salvation

http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=107720&p=1512414#p1512414
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Re: Razorblade Salvation

Postby classthe_king » Feb 12th, '11, 18:23

I played the beat but I couldn't catch the flow at all. Some lines seemed too long and some were way too short. I don't know how good you are at rapping so I don't know if it actually flows or not and I just can't catch up to it. Lyrics were pretty good, you had good rhyming. You said hope way too much though. Try not to reuse the same word too many times.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Razorblade Salvation

Postby Atone » Feb 15th, '11, 07:18

Do you have a mic man? PM me, i got some idea's, thats if you wanna collab for one of my up coming mixtapes
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Re: Razorblade Salvation

Postby WakeUpShow » Feb 15th, '11, 20:50

Jekil_N_Hyde wrote:Do you have a mic man? PM me, i got some idea's, thats if you wanna collab for one of my up coming mixtapes

i wish, but sadly i don't. good luck with your mixtapes though.
and Sentus, thanks for the feed
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