Just Rhymin'

[Drug.Ballad]

Your rhyming is getting better
Im not the best at rhyming and giving feedback, but this is what i picked up on. Quick look.
Rhymes that worked:

In Hell-Man & (Christ)ian Mail Man
night/flight
bones/hoes

Worked a lil:
day time/me grind
worth/worms
better world/wittle bird

Didnt think worked that well:

centuries/history
finish/menace

Of corse it all depends on how people say/read words as well. Good verse as well.

[Drug.Ballad]

Ive done my verse, waitin to hear from CC, and you 2. I wrote on that call out page, once everyones done there verse we can post it

[Maybe]

I tend to only reply to people who PM me and ask me to, to be honest. But, I do read just about every post made here, and I only comment when some serious feedback is needed.

As for your work: It's not bad at all, and the rhyming is very good. I can see that you've improved immensely from past work I've read, and I'm glad to see you expanding your vocabulary. My problem with this piece is a lack of interesting content (that actually makes sense structurally) and a flow that doesn't remain the same throughout the verse.

Now, with the improvements you've made, I can't imagine you'd stumble in to any major difficulties in the growth process from now. You've passed the bar most people struggle with at first, and for that I give you a 7/10.