Full Of Hate

[VenomBlackViper]

I feed off anger till i'm full of hate & sick to my stomach
Every bitch that I fuck with has kids & a husband
Preaching peace with a black pistol in hand
Raped Mary & attacked her little lamb
Broke down heavens gates with a sacrificial ram
Death artist, I draw blood with a pen knife
Now that's death (w)rites
You say you a gangsta but you're a fake & a liar
I burn my bridges over a lake of fire
Then drop in a token of love & watch the coin bubble
Ejaculate acid & give your bitch groin trouble
Kidney stoner, smoking joint muscles
The only rapper to release albums from an insane ward
Lightning fast, you can't weather my brainstorm
Drugged up villian
And I hate your guts but i'd love to spill em

(yes I put "hate" in both the first & last bars on purpose)
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[WakeUpShow]

God I love your punchlines. The sacrifical ram, kidney stoner, and brainstorm lines were awesome. Good flow too. Would you mind leaving some feedback to my piece "Natural Oddity"? it's only an 8.

[VenomBlackViper]

Thanks, and I gave you feedback on that piece.

[Maybe]

The flow was great, and the punches were fucking sick haha. I haven't read much of your stuff, but this piece was full of quote worthy lines, and pretty good vocabulary.

I'm impressed man. If you get a chance, check out my new stuff sometime.

[VenomBlackViper]

Appreciate it man I left feedback on your stuff as well.

[Sam.]

Nice punches there bro ,flow was up to the mark and rest damn what others said about it .

You say you a gangsta but you're a fake & a liar
I burn my bridges over a lake of fire

good lines

[VenomBlackViper]

Thanks both of you, CREAM i'll go check out your writing right now. (see what I did there )

[Master Chief]

I wonder what inspired this

This was good, man. I can relate because as you know I wrote something, angry like this recently so I understand. Punches and creative lines are definitely your strong point. Rhyming good as always and I loved that bridge/burn/fire/lake line. You always make your lines connect which I love. Feed off anger -> sick to my stomach. Love that shit.

I kinda slipped sometimes with the flow but of course I'm sure you have it down in your head. Good stuff, man. One of fav. writers on CW

[classthe_king]

Dude this was amazing, you and Mike need to get mics for real. If you want me to help you structure your stuff to beats so you can record them let me know.

[FreeSpeech]

Every bitch that I fuck with has kids & a husband

Correct me if I'm wrong, but aren't you like 15 or 16?

Dope lines though...

[VenomBlackViper]

@MC
thanks man, I mostly focus on punches, twisted humor & horrorcore right now

@Class once I start recording shit (probably next year) i'm gonna need help with that, I also need to work on a unique rap voice. That's one of the main parts standing out is sounding different.

@Obama i'm 17, also notice
sick to my stomach/bitch that I fuck with/kids & a husband
besides what's wrong with fucking MILFS?

[FreeSpeech]

Haha nothing if that's your thing, I'm assuming this is a kinda fictional, storytelling work though

[VenomBlackViper]

Mostly
I'm not even into MILFs actually it just rhymed with "sick to my stomach" & it was funny so I threw it in there.

[rinnie1207]

Wow, your punchlines in this are fucking awesome.

I loved this line

I burn my bridges over a lake of fire

[ArsheyHaq]

Your punchlines were outrageously good, as usual plus your rhyming is getting better too! I notice better vocab and a lot more complex rhyme schemes by you Here were some of my fav. lines:

"Then drop in a token of love & watch the coin bubble
Ejaculate acid & give your bitch groin trouble
Kidney stoner, smoking joint muscles"

"Raped Mary & attacked her little lamb
Broke down heavens gates with a sacrificial ram"
^^^HAHA^^^

and


"The only rapper to release albums from an insane ward
Lightning fast, you can't weather my brainstorm
Drugged up villian
And I hate your guts but i'd love to spill em"

Keep postin', man. I'm loving everything you come out with.