Innovation - Hip-Hop

[Innovation]

I really wanted to expand on my verse with the collaboration with Liquid so I have. I've quickly wrote a few more bars. The general concept is to explain that hip-hop is not simplistic in terms of rhyming and then to explain what it was built on and not what you may hear on the radio.

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Any constructive feed is much appreciated!

When people say "Hip-hop takes no talent", I laugh at them,
Reply "yeah, you're right" with the utmost amount of sarcasm,
Because, artists like Sadistik have lyrics you can't fathom,
You can't comprehend the skill it takes when crafting 'em,
You know a lot about rhyming? Ever heard of slanting one?
Nah, didn't think so. Your ignorance has got us laughing son!
Like a greyhound every artist wants to open with a flying start,
Trying to prove to everyone, this genre is far from a dying art,
Fight the ignorance on every occasion, until the sirens start,
Pounce at any competition with the bravery of a lions heart,
We'll forever fix the pieces to hip-hop's dying parts,
Hip-hop will always have an objective, like a flying dart

Here's some room for thought!

Take Lose Yourself for an example, I'm not sure if you know it b
but the song has multi's and internal rhyming, complex poetry,
And I know it seems that hip-hop is mainly about cars and money,
Or who's in the most bars.. it's funny, we started off as story-telling,
Like Slick Rick with Children's Story, it was never about who's more a felon,
Fuck what's selling, it doesn't mean that's true hip-hop, remember that,
Sales are irrelevant, dismember that! Nas' One Mic didn't chart well,
Never did Tupac's Changes, but both are considered classics, both are heart felt.



Both Changes and One Mic are classics in hip-hop, they charted in the Billboard 100, but didn't peak above 32.

Thanks!

[WakeUpShow]

you have good rhyming thoughout. your lines are too long though, so it throws the flow off. Shorten the lines, and try a unique flow with better vocab and you're set. You've already got the content and rhyming .

[Innovation]

Yeah that's great but the length of the bar stood against it even though it's structured well ( )
But that was awesome man

Like Slick Rick with Children's Story, it was never about who's more a felon,

That was

We need to collab again pal , the only thing wrong with this is what Cosh' said otherwise this is awesome

Thanks for the feed guys and yeah, we need to collab again. PM me with any ideas bro.

[Maybe]

Most of the rhyming was great, and the the flow would have been great if: your lines weren't so dragged out. I found that the flow was chopped up because your lines were overly extended; otherwise, the piece was good. You have interesting content (although I personally don't like mentioning of others songs or albums), the vocabulary was pretty decent, and you have a good grasp of structuring a verse.

It's actually pretty good, you just need to fix the flow and line layout. Shouldn't be too much work since the piece is already properly structured.

[Innovation]

Most of the rhyming was great, and the the flow would have been great if: your lines weren't so dragged out. I found that the flow was chopped up because your lines were overly extended; otherwise, the piece was good. You have interesting content (although I personally don't like mentioning of others songs or albums), the vocabulary was pretty decent, and you have a good grasp of structuring a verse.

It's actually pretty good, you just need to fix the flow and line layout. Shouldn't be too much work since the piece is already properly structured.

Thanks again dude. Really do appreciate the feed.