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FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby FreeSpeech » May 29th, '11, 05:58

OK, so I don't like posting my writing here because I see it as essentially wasting good verses should I ever wanna use them. Therefore and thuswith, I only post trash I'll never, ever use. E.g. horrorcore.
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Sitting on the dusty floor
Packing up your grungy corpse
In plastic wrap, my drastic act latched with bungy cords
What I did ain't been done before
Find fun in gore, I'm Bundy's lord
PMSing whores get cheeky, lets see who can get bloody more
I'm a real oddity
Opposite of Bill Cosby
Bungee jump with your intestines
redefining a thrill hobby
Chloroforming bitches in the motel lobby
Clerk asks where I'm going, oh hell prob'ly
Buffalo Bill's idol, stuffing my kills' vital-
Organs with preservers, I'm nothing but ill, vile-
Thoughts stay racing
I'm not complacent
Till I'm topping Jason
And the cops are pacing
On their watch and stations
Trying to stop my hatred
But I got the patience
So I'm not caught I'm waiting
Ready to strike with my heaviest knife
Beheading a dyke, then resetting it right-
Above my mantle, centerpiece of the room
Replacing peace with doom, I feast on the gloom
That accompanies crime scenes
Find comfort in dime piece-
bodies in my trunk, I'm a lover of fine screams
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby WinstonMARX » May 29th, '11, 23:33

The content was really really bland run of the mill stuff but your rhymes were nice and the piece is technically solid.
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby Atone » May 31st, '11, 03:31

ehhhh, stay away from horrorcore man, you can do better writing normal verses,

Although, this looks really good, it seems forced, i like that line "opposite of cosby" though

actually man, after reading this a second time, i think you should record this, i like it, multi's in this are crazy, i started writing somethin like this back in 08 when i was in jail, but quickly wrote over it cuz i didn't want the guards to do some kind of bed check, find it, and think i'm in need of help or some shit lol.

being in jail can give you some crazy horrorcore style thoughts tho
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby FreeSpeech » Jun 1st, '11, 02:16

Thanks guys. Yeah, the content is 100% trash. I'm not into horrorcore much at all, and it's not part of my lifestyle at all, I might as well have been writing about my life as an Indonesian taxi triver.

I just put it together for the multis, IDK what other types of verses I could say "grungy corpse" in.
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jun 1st, '11, 02:21

You should change the title of this thread to 'FreeSpeech is an attention whore!!!'.. Seriously, I used to like you, but you're wayy too into yourself :n:

and I agree with you completely here:

FreeSpeech wrote:I only post trash


this is trash...
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby FreeSpeech » Jun 1st, '11, 02:35

ArsheyHaq wrote:You should change the title of this thread to 'FreeSpeech is an attention whore!!!'.. Seriously, I used to like you, but you're wayy too into yourself :n:

and I agree with you completely here:

FreeSpeech wrote:I only post trash


this is trash...

Haha I honestly have no clue who you are, your username isn't familiar. But thanks for once liking me? I'm flattered.

Well shit, Imma go cut my wrists now because some random account agreed with me that this verse is bad and said I'm too into myself. How is that exactly? Because I put my name in the title? I was making fun of myself skittle nuts, I'm a 20 year old black kid who isn't remotely horrorcore or acts like it, ever.
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jun 1st, '11, 02:44

FreeSpeech wrote:Well shit, Imma go cut my wrists now because some random account agreed with me that this verse is bad and said I'm too into myself. How is that exactly? Because I put my name in the title? I was making fun of myself skittle nuts, I'm a 20 year old black kid who isn't remotely horrorcore or acts like it, ever.


K, shut up now. No one cares about your life story.
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby FreeSpeech » Jun 1st, '11, 02:47

ArsheyHaq wrote:
FreeSpeech wrote:Well shit, Imma go cut my wrists now because some random account agreed with me that this verse is bad and said I'm too into myself. How is that exactly? Because I put my name in the title? I was making fun of myself skittle nuts, I'm a 20 year old black kid who isn't remotely horrorcore or acts like it, ever.


K, shut up now. No one cares about your life story.

Anonymous internet users are so hurtful :'(
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby Raids-God » Jun 1st, '11, 10:03

Good Stuff homes :worship:

And Fuck ArsheyHaq lil bitch with to much spare time :coffee:
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby Raids-God » Jun 1st, '11, 10:14

C.R.E.A.M wrote:
Raids-God wrote:Good Stuff homes :worship:

And Fuck ArsheyHaq lil bitch with to much spare time :coffee:


Naah, ArsheyHaq may not be known in the forum in general, he's a top 5 writer in this forum, his work in Creative Writings >>>> 75% shit on the internet and not only on this forum, including myself (and I say it loudly)

Not to pick sides with anyone, just saying, all of people on this "fight" are my homeboys, make love, not war. :beerchug:


Nah theres no need to try and randomly Attack him, He made some bars, leave criticism and whatever,
But dont start saying some other shit about atention hores and stuff :laughing:
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby WinstonMARX » Jun 1st, '11, 23:36

FreeSpeech wrote:Thanks guys. Yeah, the content is 100% trash. I'm not into horrorcore much at all, and it's not part of my lifestyle at all, I might as well have been writing about my life as an Indonesian taxi triver.


Because everyone lives what they rap :unsure:
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby FreeSpeech » Jun 2nd, '11, 01:05

WinstonMARX wrote:
FreeSpeech wrote:Thanks guys. Yeah, the content is 100% trash. I'm not into horrorcore much at all, and it's not part of my lifestyle at all, I might as well have been writing about my life as an Indonesian taxi triver.


Because everyone lives what they rap :unsure:

Haha nah I know, but it's not even a part of my rap style. It's 100% out of character for me, therefore "trash".

Raids-God wrote:Good Stuff homes :worship:

And Fuck ArsheyHaq lil bitch with to much spare time :coffee:

Thanks homie, he's just really jealous of meeeee cuz I'm want he wants to beeeee but instead of just admitting it he walks around and says all kinds of really mean things because he's just a meanie, a big weenie
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Re: FreeSpeech goes horrorcore!!!

Postby Raids-God » Jun 2nd, '11, 01:16

FreeSpeech wrote:
WinstonMARX wrote:
FreeSpeech wrote:Thanks guys. Yeah, the content is 100% trash. I'm not into horrorcore much at all, and it's not part of my lifestyle at all, I might as well have been writing about my life as an Indonesian taxi triver.


Because everyone lives what they rap :unsure:

Haha nah I know, but it's not even a part of my rap style. It's 100% out of character for me, therefore "trash".

Raids-God wrote:Good Stuff homes :worship:

And Fuck ArsheyHaq lil bitch with to much spare time :coffee:

Thanks homie, he's just really jealous of meeeee cuz I'm want he wants to beeeee but instead of just admitting it he walks around and says all kinds of really mean things because he's just a meanie, a big weenie


I Hear ya, I Hear ya, if i drop any stuff in CR anytime soon ill feed this for sure :y:
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