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Clever With The Beat

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Re: Clever With The Beat

Postby Atone » May 31st, '11, 04:21

sort of feelin that, only part i didn't really like was "My name is Meltdown or Liquid or Cream or, just fuck it
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you could have said "I get sick- call me Liquid- Meltdown or cream/ say my name 3 times and i'll kill you in your dreams"

somethin to that effect, the way you said it, seemed stretchy, would have ruined it if you were doin that in real life as a freestyle or somethin, but i liked the rest of it, i'm sure you could do better tho man
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