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Only To Remain Me In The End

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Only To Remain Me In The End

Postby Rain Matrix » Jun 21st, '11, 21:36

remember me, the Ill Minded/
the same mindset I Still Rhyme With//

Constantly when I Bomb the Beat/
with a whole lot of Honesty//

death is what this world Promised me/
Ironically, I'm On the Streets//

talking like I don't Wanna leave/
so I inhale the Chronic Deep//

into my lungs and Let it Go/
forgetting all the Stress I Know/

only for it to keep Returning
that must be what keeps me Burning//

like I'm close to the Flames of Hell/
reminded of the Pain I've Felt//

but in the mirror a Stranger Yells/
hoping he can Remain Himself//
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Re: Only To Remain Me In The End

Postby ArsheyHaq » Jun 21st, '11, 21:48

This was fairly short, but you packed a lot of good material into it. Nice work. It was pretty deep stuff with high skill levels of rhyming :y: My favorite was how you ended it:

"like I'm close to the Flames of Hell/
reminded of the Pain I've Felt//

but in the mirror a Stranger Yells/
hoping he can Remain Himself//"

Try to stay away from too dark of a theme though; it depresses me lol
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