Ball Of Death

[mdemaz]

I decided I wanna stack some ammo before my next CD so here's a few of the bars I typed up.

Enter the ball of death this wall is a mess
too much talk not enough rest
I'm not human anymore I just wanna destroy press
boy this is a test no joy just stress
how can I survive in this mind state
everyone seems to just turn to blind hate with no decoy to detect
I'm yelling and screaming just wanting this mic to break
so I'll be free from needing to rap and cry and hate
there's so much wrong with me I don't even get angry and crap at whiny trollbait
fuck the world I'm done with it all oh nice my friend brang me my gat now buy me a drank

Fucking bang.

So yeah lol..First time I ever wrote something here lol..I usually did it in the cypher thread..

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=119196

[Enimee]

it was ok man not horrible, it was a lil short and shyt but you had a couple well desined multis in there and your rhymes schemes made up for what you lacked in structure givin you a somewhat decent flow...
still a little choppy though

work on building you concepts better and your structure...lookin forward to your next one

[mdemaz]

Lol..This was pretty much a prototype.
Yeah.. a lot of people say my multis make up for my lack of structure..Sometimes I just pair up quads and write the whole of the 32 bars of a verse and THEN turn it into storytelling/structure...That usually takes a few minutes really..I usually just change the title of the verses and then remove the title altogether and put them into a song..

Anyway, thanks for your thoughts!